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1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2002-03-29 06:26 AM



Morning Moon

the moon hung
thick in the morning
refusing to release its
white knuckled grip
past the darkened void
paralyzed in the sky
unable to move

hanging like some
priceless antique
in an open arena
begging to be
dusted by touch
accustomed to being viewed
but shy in embrace

but there it stood
against the wall of heaven
waiting for the world’s caress
moons have no vaulted value
it’s wealth is
something to be enjoyed

just as verse
from a lover
never recited
only curls and yellows
into tomorrow
fading a heart

today learn something new
from the lingering
morning moon
desire is nothing
until you
put it to use

"Pour yourself thick, when it is you, that you spread."

© Copyright 2002 Helen Chambers - All Rights Reserved
nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
1 posted 2002-03-29 06:53 AM


hanging like some
priceless antique
in an open arena
begging to be
dusted by touch
accustomed to being viewed
but shy in embrace
...
a beautiful verse and image...and about  Desire...I must agree

*s
M

Krawdad
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2 posted 2002-03-29 10:23 AM


h,
Or perhaps,

"from the lingering
mourning moon"

(what I might have said)

In any case, I'm enjoying the "expansion" of your poetry of late.  I like this one too.
e

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3 posted 2002-03-29 07:34 PM




(smiles) Oh Helen, this is sooooooo gorgeous, I too am always dazzled when I see the moon in the sky in the morning, it to me is a souvenir God offers us all, almost like papier-mache stuck to the sunlit skies! (kiss on cheek) This is a wonderful poem, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Helen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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4 posted 2002-04-02 12:02 PM


OneSlickLady~
This is 'one slick' piece of writing~
I adore the message~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
         noles1@totcon.com                    

lunatic
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since 2001-04-20
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5 posted 2002-04-02 12:33 PM


I have NEVER been hanged.  Heck, I didn't even have a trial
I love you writing about me, though

Let thy moon arise.  William Blake

Englishpoet
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6 posted 2002-04-02 12:38 PM


After Marge, what could one add but to reinforce that this is wonderful imagery. I have just got to this Open Poetry site and would like to stay a while.

Asif  

The heights by great men reached and kept
Were not attained by sudden flight,
But they while their companions slept
Were toiling upward in the nigh

Verve
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7 posted 2002-04-02 12:53 PM




Those last few lines really got me thinking ... ...

This was a delight to read

Thanks for sharing it.


Englishpoet
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8 posted 2002-04-02 03:39 PM


Hi

I read this poem again. One comment, do need to give a message at the end
"today learn something new
from the lingering
morning moon
desire is nothing
until you
put it to use"

I like it myself as I often do this with my poetry (you can view at my site http://www.englishpoets.com), but this poem could stand without this message. You could then use this part to create another poem.

Best wishes

Asif

The heights by great men reached and kept
Were not attained by sudden flight,
But they while their companions slept
Were toiling upward in the nigh

Bill Charles
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9 posted 2002-04-04 05:38 PM


1slick_lady - no matter what page I find your poems on they are always touching...

BC
  

vandana
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10 posted 2002-04-04 06:53 PM


enjoyed it a lot one of your best
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