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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2002-03-28 05:00 AM


like giggling stones of white
standing on one foot
arms stretched out
pretending to be angels...

she would sit there for hours
talking to him, her lord
I would hear them laughing
the grass ground
obsorbed their sounds

her idea of death
was that he was a handsome lover
with gentle hands
that just picked her life
cell by cell
and ate it like small candies

she said he loved her most
and kissed her in the mornings
and when she felt pain
he would hurry up a little
to make it pass

I never saw him that way
but I did see him in her eyes
when she looked at me
she got to where
she didn't have time
to spend with me
was always in a hurry
to get back to him

sometimes now, I see her wave
from behind the rows of stones....


©Dark

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2002-03-28 06:51 AM



Your mind takes a thought and twists it in exceptional ways ... very good! The more I read of your work, the more I need to ask...you are published, yes?

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (03-28-2002 09:07 AM).]

Severn
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2 posted 2002-03-28 08:06 AM


I love your writing, pure and simple. The more I read - the more I like..

K

Marge Tindal
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3 posted 2002-03-28 09:02 AM


DarkStranger~
Your writing touches me ...

'sometimes now, I see her wave
from behind the rows of stones....'


*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Cpat Hair
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4 posted 2002-03-28 09:25 AM


Bravo! again you have entranced me with the visions and the feelings I get from the words....


Martie
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5 posted 2002-03-28 12:07 PM


DS

This left me with now words to tell you exactly, except that it touched me.

Mistletoe Angel
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6 posted 2002-03-28 12:14 PM




(sigh) Your words always touch me deeply, sweet friend, every one is a true gem to all our hearts! (big hugggssssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is excellent! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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7 posted 2002-03-28 12:21 PM


Your writing continues to captivate me!

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Dark Stranger
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8 posted 2002-03-29 05:54 AM


Sunshine
Your mind takes a thought and twists it in exceptional ways ... very good! The more I read of your work, the more I need to ask...you are published, yes?

only in minds sweet friend...and a few little places where it is too dark for much to be read.   Thank you for the read and reply..




Severn

I love your writing, pure and simple. The more I read - the more I like..

Thank you so much Severn, you bless me

Marge Tindal

DarkStranger~
Your writing touches me ...


Thank you so much Marge, I enjoy your reviews.

Cpat Hair
Bravo! again you have entranced me with the visions and the feelings I get from the words....

Muy thanks friend, so pleased that it finds eye friends

Martie
DS

This left me with now words to tell you exactly, except that it touched me.

Ms Martie, sweet neighbor, thank you for walking by and reading my offerings..and stopping to place a flower beside them.



Mistletoe Angel

  

(sigh) Your words always touch me deeply, sweet friend, every one is a true gem to all our hearts! (big hugggssssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is excellent! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!


Noah, you are a wonderful soul with your replys...thank you


Enchantress
Your writing continues to captivate me!
~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Enchanting one...we dance often there
and the rain never waters the skin..just touches lightly on ends

thank you so much




Soleil Noir
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9 posted 2002-03-29 11:18 AM



Um...good!  Needs to be read a little more...

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