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...and then she cried
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...and then she cried |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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twenty eight years ago she locked it shut it away tight safe but one day she thought to feel again and the entrance was too corroded to open she banged pushed kicked and begged it would not listen with all possible human endeavor she prayed it was still locked tight God patiently watched, and every now and then in case she was listening, He called to her with gentle knocking she finally broke down and looked up ok let’s do it your way inches at a time it opened a beam of love found its way inside... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
sometimes all it takes is one little shaft of light to show us all is not lost... nicely presented... |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
but one day she thought to feel again Funny how sometimes, it's right there where you left it, just needs a little dusting off. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
This touched me more than I can express, I wish that I had written this for, it seems that you speak of my life. This is excellent writing and it's a keeper~ Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
it would not listen with all possible human endeavor she prayed it was still locked tight God patiently watched, and every now and then in case she was listening, He called to her with gentle knocking she finally broke down and looked up ok let’s do it your way inches at a time it opened a beam of love found its way inside... She was alone in her crying, dear lady... for this is so beautiful it shared the tears. *S* How many times do we pray... and determinedly go our own way? This is a powerful statement of faith... and that beam of light is a bud of hope. *S* Superb! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
...Exquisite!!... ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
jellybeans light always overpowers darkness...it just sometimes takes a hand to pull away the curtain. This is powerful yet fragile poetry of feeling...hope filled. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JellyBeans~ You've touched the crying-well of me~ Thank you ... for I needed that~ soft ... delicate ...~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
One of my favourite Jellybeans. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
thank you all....guess you can tell it was a rough night huh? am drained, but, somehow its different than usual....am glad this touched you, and I hope any tears, were good ones  |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
i LOVE the last 2 lines, ties it together perfectly my friend |
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