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Temptress
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0 posted 2002-03-26 06:33 AM


What seems like the first Spring rain
raps lightly on the ceiling
picking up its beat
I am thinking of you.
Morning
my first thought is always of love
and how much I am thankful
to be in your heart.
No matter the days wrought with trouble
I am missing you
and loving you
for you are the soft calm that settles
my restless spirit
and you have etched your voice
into the heart of my words.
Softness quarrels politely
with a previous mood
asking just this moment
its time in the spotlight
so that I may keep a promise.
I write for you
I love for you
and I am the passion
that will sink your will
when the inevitable of us arrives.
I love you, Darling.

How grave is my condition, for I cannot find the words to say, I need you so.
~Sarah MacLachlan~

© Copyright 2002 Jennifer - All Rights Reserved
Kit McCallum
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1 posted 2002-03-26 06:35 AM


Jenn, this is beautiful. Wonderful phrasing throughout, and such tender and moving sentiments. Very much enjoyed.

Best wishes,
/Kit

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2 posted 2002-03-26 08:34 AM


very nice...and the thoughts that go with this would touch any mans heart...

as usual, I enjoyed!

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3 posted 2002-03-26 02:59 PM


wow. . . I can just hear the beat of the rain on the roof from this one. . .

the depth here, is as always, amazing. . .

well done. . .

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4 posted 2002-03-26 08:17 PM




(smiles) Awwwwwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, may he always keep his promise for you too and together may you tie the knot of eternal love and embrace each new morning with loves joy forever! (kiss on cheek) This is a wonderful ramble from your golden heart, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jenn, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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5 posted 2002-03-26 08:28 PM


*sigh* Jen, you always write with such deep feeling, I love it and hope to be able to express myself like this someday.
Larry C
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6 posted 2002-03-26 09:07 PM


Jen,
Echoing Kit here! What an awesome love poem. I want one like that. Wow! What a lucky guy.

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