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Get Out of my Head (or, It's Been a Bad Night)
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Get Out of my Head (or, It's Been a Bad Night) |
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Skyfire 
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding 
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I sat there and thought... You entered right in I love you so much Don't know what you did to win The space in my heart Was put up for sale Had given up hope Any love had grown pale You walked into my life At my invitation When I first fell I wanted to give you initiation To see if you're worthy Of the feelings I'd forgotten I was able to feel I started to cry Knowing I couldn't hold you Not knowing if you miss me The way I miss you The hurt is too much Bittersweet in its taste Wouldn't trade it for anything Would like it to make haste My love for you scares me Get out of my head I can't stop thinking about you You'd think you were the first man I've ever loved The way I keep carrying on over you They say there's only one man worth my tears You're that one man It's been a bad night Maybe I'm just tired But I really do love you So much that it hurts. Hopelessly in love |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
*huggles*  Huggles :) |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Rhonda, I know just how you feel, it can indeed hurt sometimes for I love Joanna so much and just wish I could be there for her and calm the yearning that fills my head too! (kiss on cheek) I wish for his love to forever fill you with happiness and heal your wounds of longing, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Rhonda, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
boy can I relate to this! I'm still carrying on over my first love! It has faded a lot with time though. Remember to always love yourself first and true love and happiness will be yours (hugs) |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
My love for you scares me Get out of my head I can't stop thinking about you Indeed I understand! I enjoyed the write. Nicely done Sky.  Perhaps a bit of spacing spreading out? It seemed a very large chuck of verse at one time. IMHO. ~ Titus "My body is merely the canvas of my soul." |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Well said, Skyfire. It's so very hard to shake those feelings and memories. Cor |
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TriXter Member
since 2002-03-20
Posts 112The One |
Understood, I know how you feel.. trust me And you displayed the emotions very well. thanks for sharing |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
It sounds as if someone has stolen your heart. Nicely penned, Skyfire. |
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D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
This is a very nice piece that would stand better broken up with some stanzas. It gives the reader a moment to feel each section of this great poem. Blessings in the love that will bring us the words to bless each other with in a lifetime. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
It's been a bad night Maybe I'm just tired But I really do love you So much that it hurts. Had a few nights like that, myself. Love the title, too. |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
I just wanted to say thank you for all your kind words I realise there is absolutely no form or sense at all to this poem; I was just writing... I don't tend to think about form and rythm and things like that when I hurt like that. Thanks again! Hopelessly in love |
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