Rewrite---A Summer Night (villanelle)

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strbbux
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since 2001-12-19

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0 posted 2002-03-22 09:54 AM

Thanks Allen for your help and suggestions on this. floria
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A Summer Night(villanelle)

The quiet beauty of a summer night.
Breathless I am left. Such deep desire
The inner soul of me does now ignite.

A verse Shakepearean you now recite.
My spirits lifting higher now and higher.
The quiet beauty of a summer night.

The stars in sapphire splendor sparkle bright
With soft sweet words that you alone inspire,
The inner soul of me does now ignite.

It moves me, I am filled with pure delight.
Wonder, oh mysterious, I admire
The quiet beauty of a summer night.

The lantern moon shines softly in my sight.
To be with only you I do aspire.
The inner soul of me does now ignite.

A princess I who clings to gallant knight.
A faithful love my yearning heart requires.
The quiet beauty of a summer night.
The inner soul of me does now ignite.

Floria Kelderhouse

© 2002

[This message has been edited by strbbux (03-22-2002 09:56 AM).]

catalinamoon

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since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

1 posted 2002-03-22 10:00 AM

Floria, your writing grows every day. I have no idea how to do this form, what an excellent example you have given.
Sandra

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

2 posted 2002-03-22 10:21 AM

Floria

enjoy your work, it is a pleasure to view this art

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

3 posted 2002-03-22 11:38 AM

You're spaking my language when you write of love

This is beautiful, Floria!
Maybe someday, I'll be brave enough to attempt a villanelle.

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

4 posted 2002-03-22 01:10 PM

The lantern moon shines softly in my sight.
To be with only you I do aspire.
The inner soul of me does now ignite.

Think I could borrow this??

Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 997
northern mountains, Idaho

5 posted 2002-03-22 01:13 PM

This is truly lovely. So much tender emotion is a pleasure to absorb. A beautiful poem.

strbbux
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since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

6 posted 2002-03-22 03:25 PM

Sandra, thank you so much your encouragement is truly appreciated. floria

Dark stranger, thank you, you honor me by calling it art. floria

Melissa, thank you, do attempt it. It truly is easy if you chose the key lines with caution. floria

Duncan, thank you, and it is always a compliment when someone likes a work enough to borrow, so Go ahead....floria

Rosemary, thank you so much for your reply. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

7 posted 2002-03-22 06:27 PM

(smiles) Ooohhhhhhh...this is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, your gorgeous words of love always make me smile, everyday you amaze me as I watch your writing grow as does the love in your heart! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, your words shine with the magic of Shakespeare! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Floria, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

strbbux
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since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

8 posted 2002-03-22 08:15 PM

Thanks Noah you are so sweet, floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Madame Chipmunk
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since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

9 posted 2002-03-22 11:09 PM

The stars in sapphire splendor sparkle bright
With soft sweet words that you alone inspire,
The inner soul of me does now ignite.

Beautifully done, Floria...
I have never even attempted a villanelle...I don't think I have the knowledge, the patience or the nerve to tackle one of these.

You are a wonderful poet and a wonderful person...

~hugggsss~

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

strbbux
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since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

10 posted 2002-03-23 09:02 AM

Oh Lyra you are truly a great friend. And your poems always touch my heart. You could easily do one of these, just pull up the form and copy the pattern. It truly is easy. Love ya, floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

11 posted 2002-03-23 11:31 AM

Very good, enjoyed

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

12 posted 2002-03-24 12:15 PM

How I long for the warmth of those summer nights and the lantern of light that you captured so well. Beauuuuuutiful Floria!!!!

strbbux
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since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

13 posted 2002-03-24 11:14 AM

Thank you much RS. floria

Blues thanks much for your sweet reply. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

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