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Dulcinea
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0 posted 2002-03-21 03:00 PM


Make me thy possession
and I shall give to thee my passion
Make me thy compulsion
and I shall show thee my devotion

Make my heart to know thee
and I shall be truly free
Make my soul in faith to see
and my eyes shall behold eternity.

Make thy handmaid thine
and I shall drink only thy wine
Make my love to ever shine
and about thee my arms shall entwine.

Make me all that thou desire
and to affection sweet, aspire.


© Copyright 2002 Dulcinea - All Rights Reserved
Victoria
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1 posted 2002-03-21 03:27 PM


Very pretty Dulcie..nicely penned indeed hugs..enjoyed

                 ~Victoria~

              


"If music be the food of love, play on."  (William Shakespeare)



Dulcinea
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2 posted 2002-03-21 03:31 PM


Thanks Vicki! You know me...always the sonnet...though this one is not really one I like all that much...Thanks for the sweet reply I appreciate it!
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3 posted 2002-03-21 04:36 PM


this is well written. . . but, yes, it could use a little work. . .

hmmmmm. . . the first verse is really all that you need to work with. . . let me take a look, and I'll get back to you. . .

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Silver Streak
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4 posted 2002-03-21 06:08 PM


Dulcinea, I love it just the way you've written it.

((Dulcinea))
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Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher

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5 posted 2002-03-21 06:13 PM


enjoyed
ShadowRider
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6 posted 2002-03-21 08:20 PM


Yep..need work

Ok..you anguished long enuff!  This was puuuuuuuuurfect, Kitten!

Jeff


[This message has been edited by ShadowRider (03-22-2002 06:48 AM).]

Dulcinea
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7 posted 2002-03-21 08:25 PM


Thank you Sven, I appreciate anything you can come up with...though I think it is beyond help myself

((Newell))thank you for being TOO kind! You honestly are ya know!

vandana, I am glad you enjoyed it, thank you!


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8 posted 2002-03-21 08:33 PM


Dulcinea, love these lines.
"Make thy handmaid thine
and I shall drink only thy wine'

beautifully done. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

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9 posted 2002-03-21 08:40 PM




(smiles) Awwwwwwww, this is such a beautifully breathtaking sonnet, sweet friend, may your love forever make you all you want to be and make you as happy as can be forever! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is gorgeous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Dulcinea, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

JamesMichael
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10 posted 2002-03-21 08:53 PM


Really nice...James
Dulcinea
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11 posted 2002-03-21 09:58 PM


Darlin...told ya it needed work!
   ~~~awww...you are just sooooo adorable! ~~happy sigh~~

Floria, thank you so very much...there are a few good lines in there, and I tried to keep each stanza separte by ryhme...but Sven is right, that first one has just something not right about it...again, thank you!  

Noah, what can I say? I am so very sure my love will, as he always does, make me happy! Thank you sweet poet! (((hug)))

James, thank you very much!  

[This message has been edited by Dulcinea (03-22-2002 08:49 AM).]

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