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SEA
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with you

0 posted 2002-03-20 10:17 PM





Hold onto me
just a bit
I will never walk away
unless you ask me

Hold onto me
I need you to stay
whatever you do
don't walk away
no matter what I might say


Lie down with me
keep it fantasy
promise
not to make
any promises
and
I’ll promise
not to leave

I am not the friend you miss
You are not the lover that I crave
let's lie down, anyway

Let me lay with you
if only for a while
I'll heal your ache
you can find my smile

I promise not to promise
we can pretend it's all true
I promise not to promise
or ask anything real from you



~Duncan & SEA~


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A Whisper's Caress
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1 posted 2002-03-20 10:19 PM


thunderous applause...standing ovation.
What a fantastic combo the two of make.
Sea's romantic spirit, and Duncan's wonderful turn of phrase...
Wow....

ThisDiamond
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2 posted 2002-03-20 10:21 PM


A sweet deception...and a grand duet.
ThisDiamond

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3 posted 2002-03-20 10:21 PM


Gorgeous duet poem, SEA and Duncan. So sensually arresting with a wonderfully, flowing rhythm.  ***Ivy Rose
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4 posted 2002-03-20 10:22 PM




YAY!!! Oooooohhhhh...this is soooooooo beautiful, sweet friends, I LOVE THIS, I LOVE THIS!!! (BIG HUGGGSSSSSS) You two make such a beautiful team, sweet friends, may true love forever rest close to both your hearts and may your loves both fill you with true happiness! (smiles) You two are a delight to us all, sweet friends, we all love you both so much! You have such beautiful hearts, sweet Duncan and Susan, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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5 posted 2002-03-20 10:24 PM


Very touching and romantic.  I want to use the word *healing*..that was what came across so beautifully.  You two du-et so well together....more please!?  Hugs.

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

SEA
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6 posted 2002-03-20 10:31 PM


thanks guys!! and thank you Cowboy for writing with me I hope we do this again
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7 posted 2002-03-20 10:34 PM


The two of you wrote a splendid poem! Thoroughly enjoyed
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8 posted 2002-03-20 11:51 PM


Fantastic work, you two! This is great!
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9 posted 2002-03-21 12:30 PM


Well written! But really, Duncan. Straight  out of the frying pan? I would LOL at this, but no, it really is so nicely written!
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10 posted 2002-03-21 01:01 AM


Susan/Duncan,
What a tender compelling write. I really enjoyed this. Let's sea some more!

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11 posted 2002-03-21 03:34 PM


Wow, this was a wonderful duet! I truly enjoyed this, and the picture! I wrote a prose piece called Indian Love a few years ago, wish I had this pic for that one! Very nicely done!
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12 posted 2002-03-21 06:18 PM


enjoyed
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13 posted 2002-03-21 06:20 PM


This is wonderful you two...BRAVO and more!!!


Lauren~

Greeneyes~

Step through the
barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into the shadows
of my heart

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14 posted 2002-03-21 08:04 PM


Wow, this is great. You two did well together.
Sandra

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15 posted 2002-03-21 08:15 PM



Bravo you two!  This is wonderful writing and that picture is beautiful!

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

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16 posted 2002-03-21 08:18 PM


Wow Duncan and Sea, this was sensual and soft, beautifully done. floria

Floria

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But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

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17 posted 2002-03-21 09:07 PM


A very nice duet.

((Susan and Duncan))
-newell

Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com

Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher

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18 posted 2002-03-21 09:11 PM


Superbly done Sue and Duncan...loved the
theme of this...

Tracey
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19 posted 2002-03-21 09:45 PM


This has a beautifully haunting quality to it. I must say, this is great collaboration you two have penned here guys.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

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20 posted 2002-03-21 10:05 PM


Excellent duo.  Enjoyed this very much.  
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21 posted 2002-03-21 10:29 PM


thank you all very much, I had a lot of fun writing with Duncan. He is a very talented poet, one I admire very much. and Tracey thank you
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22 posted 2002-03-21 11:09 PM


First of all, let me say...it's been a really long day!
This was a blast to write with ya, Susan.  You can sure make a little dog wanna run off that porch.  (You'll understand later, trust me)
Thank you all for responding.  I would've jumped in here sooner but I was too busy running around to florists!
Tracey...you got class, darlin.

[This message has been edited by Duncan (03-22-2002 12:38 AM).]

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23 posted 2002-03-22 12:43 PM


heh.
here's another perfect example of why _I_ think duets have a bad rap.
good job, both of you.

-Dave

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24 posted 2002-03-22 09:01 AM



Wonderful duet....
With many thoughts to ponder

Thank you
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~`

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25 posted 2002-03-22 09:21 AM


Sea,
Well done, I really enjoyed this.

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26 posted 2002-03-22 09:37 AM


SEA~ & Duncan~
As lovely a duet as I've seen~
Nice blending of thoughts~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
         noles1@totcon.com                    

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27 posted 2002-03-22 11:11 AM


Duncan and Susan,

guys this rocks...i love the flow
of this poem and it's meaning...excellent
poetry at it's finest...you guys make
a wonderful team...keep it up!!

take care.
amy

"you can't stop
the rain
from pouring down
can't stop the
world from turning 'round
can't stop me from
loving you
no matter
what you do

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28 posted 2002-03-22 06:57 PM


Wow you two You did wonderfully! I loved the whole thing, but this was my favorite verse:

"Let me lay with you
if only for a while
I'll heal your ache
you can find my smile"

I really enjoyed!


Hugs,
Tara

"My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read"
     - Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home

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29 posted 2002-03-22 07:13 PM


This is great, two if my favorite writers I love this poem.
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30 posted 2002-03-22 09:57 PM




I love it!!!

A wonderful duet you two!

" I am not the friend you miss
You are not the lover that I crave
let's lie down, anyway "

"I promise not to promise
we can pretend it's all true
I promise not to promise
or ask anything real from you"

DOn't we all just long for someone, just someone, to lie down with? I love it.

~ Titus


"My body is merely the canvas of my soul."
         ~ The Night Owl

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