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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2002-03-20 04:11 PM



Real?
still words on page are real
and poets share with heart
or souls blackness the ways of feel
that sorrows brings when lonely
touches tinder on tender
leaving blaze of passion to smolder

What part of me is there
that has not been exposed by
lightning stroked flash of insight
to burn back of eyes in patterns oblique
till hazed cracks of fire obscure
the dangers lying there?

Real
Are the arteries so opened
To let flow stain page upon page
Virgin white now turned color of my soul
As time indeed does match each beat and spurt
With one less to live
One less to share

I write another


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Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
1 posted 2002-03-20 04:13 PM



This has a heartbeat all its own....

Martie
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2 posted 2002-03-20 04:29 PM


Ron

"Real
Are the arteries so opened
To let flow stain page upon page
Virgin white now turned color of my soul"

When you write such truth, I think I do see living color...a poets pen is made from pieces of soul dipped in blood.



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3 posted 2002-03-20 05:44 PM


Yes Cpat we do expose every part of ourselves dont we and that is what makes good poetry. love this. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

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4 posted 2002-03-20 05:48 PM


Cpat Hair,
A wonderful write, enjoyed.


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5 posted 2002-03-20 09:07 PM




BRAVO!!! Oh Ron, this is so very true, I couldn't agree with you more, it is sincerity and the will to express in oneself that helps us to create and shape the loving people we are and being capable of giving and sharing! (big huggsssssss) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton


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6 posted 2002-03-20 09:16 PM


...Remarkable!...

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

BluesSerenade
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7 posted 2002-03-20 11:46 PM


In the past I have made negative comments about those very same words you write of in regard to their sincerity.  I feel a sense of regret for saying so.  Of course they are real and always felt but to listen and hear them is left to our interpretation of them.  But always they touch us and make us feel.

Your words are glorious in their entirety.

Tracey
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8 posted 2002-03-20 11:50 PM


Real
Are the arteries so opened
To let flow stain page upon page
Virgin white now turned color of my soul
As time indeed does match each beat and spurt
With one less to live
One less to share

I write another

So glad you do write another. This is a truly amazing piece of how we expose ourselves in our writings.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Duncan
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9 posted 2002-03-20 11:52 PM


Real
Are the arteries so opened
To let flow stain page upon page
Virgin white now turned color of my soul
As time indeed does match each beat and spurt
With one less to live
One less to share

I write another


Good one, Ron!

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