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Duncan
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0 posted 2002-03-19 12:37 PM



wanting to sit on the floor
with the soundtrack you sent me
loud in the background
a thousand dreams, strewn around
read the poems
read the letters
read between the lines
knowing what we both know now
feel it
the missing you

and wanting
to never feel anything, again


© Copyright 2002 Duncan - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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1 posted 2002-03-19 12:46 PM


a thousand dreams, strewn around
read the poems
read the letters
read between the lines
knowing what we both know now
feel it
the missing you

and wanting
to never feel anything, again
===================================

but then you couldnt write like this...so that we feel it....
and oh do I feel this.

somewhere between the tears and the pain...
we decide it was worth it...
and that we will do it again.


tell me what you think of my new sig. *S*

Of all the things in me that I could never be ...
Of the true kept hidden from view,
the best parts of my heart were the ones touched by you.

jm

Temptress
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2 posted 2002-03-19 01:38 AM


It seems you write my heart without even knowing it. That is the mark of a great poet in my eyes. I love this, Sir!

How grave is my condition, for I cannot find the words to say, I need you so.
~Sarah MacLachlan~

passing shadows
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3 posted 2002-03-19 04:47 AM


sometimes i want that too
Dark Angel
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4 posted 2002-03-19 05:47 AM


A wonderful write, I think most of us can relate to this.

enjoyed

Maree

Kit McCallum
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5 posted 2002-03-19 06:01 AM


Oh, I could feel the ache in this one Duncan ... beautifully expressed.

Best wishes,
/Kit

A Whisper's Caress
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on the horizon of a fairytale
6 posted 2002-03-19 07:35 AM


Duncan,

this one has reached and grabbed hold....beautifully done.

Tracey
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where insanity meets breeding
7 posted 2002-03-19 08:06 AM


Hey, you have to have those wires hooked up again to hear it!!!
Once again, you’ve penned such beauty in the ache. You’ve touched my heart with this one, as only you can do.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

hoot_owl_rn
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8 posted 2002-03-19 08:23 AM


wonderful
catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
9 posted 2002-03-19 12:09 PM


Love the way you said this,Duncan.
Sandra

Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 2002-03-19 12:17 PM


Duncan,
Well said, enjoyed.

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
11 posted 2002-03-19 12:20 PM


Oh Duncan I know this ache!
You have penned it perfectly...but we do go on.
And as someone once said...
'Don't cry because it's over, smile because it happened'
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

NewEnglandlazurlu
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A Mountain Paradise
12 posted 2002-03-19 05:46 PM


So moving and beautiful. Hugs, Marti

" My wrinkles are badges of courage and reveal that I am a Mother."

vandana
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13 posted 2002-03-19 05:58 PM


enjoyed
strbbux
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14 posted 2002-03-19 06:14 PM


Duncan a truly heartfelt poem. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

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15 posted 2002-03-19 08:08 PM




(big hugggssssss) This is so sad but beautiful, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you and I hope all is alright now and you hold these memories dear to your heart, smiling with their afterglow, as now you embrace with hope a whole new joy and love you deserve so much! (sigh) This is sooooo beautifully heartfelt, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Duncan, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Madame Chipmunk
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16 posted 2002-03-19 08:15 PM


the missing you

and wanting
to never feel anything, again


The poem glowers with pain, Duncan....
the emotion comes through so clearly.

Beautifully done...   hugggssss!

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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