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Soleil Noir
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0 posted 2002-03-18 01:44 PM


Rev[e]lation

Even imaginings
become real after
time…
…you did

You found
in my fantasy
a decision to see
if a bubble
were to burst,

would either
of us

still exist…

fragile was the time when
you allowed my dream reality
to walk into your arms

can you feel me, still?

The taste of you
wakes me

and I would dream to
kiss you
again

if nothing more
than to revel in your elation.



© Copyright 2002 Soleil Noir - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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1 posted 2002-03-18 01:52 PM


fragile was the time when
you allowed my dream reality
to walk into your arms

can you feel me, still?

The taste of you
wakes me


and I would dream to
kiss you
again

if nothing more
than to revel in your elation.
===================================


my oh my...I stop in for a lunch break and now I leave with an burning ache
very very nice SN ... very.



Sven
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2 posted 2002-03-18 03:02 PM


this is just brilliant. . . I love the word play here. . . it fills it all the more with the ache that you have. . .

excellent. . .

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3 posted 2002-03-18 03:39 PM


Me too, I loved the work play, but even more I loved the feeling of sheer romance in this one.
Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
4 posted 2002-03-18 04:36 PM


leaving here with a soft sigh, knowing that at the moment anything else will be a let down. very nice, very nice.

Chris

[This message has been edited by Christopher (03-18-2002 07:41 PM).]

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5 posted 2002-03-18 06:28 PM


Solier Noir darling girl Oh my I’m stunned with admiration this has got to be one of you utter utter best. Truly the line and form in this is absolutely excellent.

I can actually feel the depth of this, this is utterly utterly wonderful. Truly awesome writing you are always a fabulous writer, in this you have excelled yourself. I can hear the longing reaching from the page into my heart with this beautiful piece of writing

  
Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79


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6 posted 2002-03-18 08:17 PM




(sigh) Such yearning and beauty fill your words, sweet friend, I wish for all this happiness to come to you and you will forever dance in the happiness of true love with the one you love! (big huggsssssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is wonderful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Soleil, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Madame Chipmunk
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7 posted 2002-03-18 10:43 PM


Soliel....this is absolutely outstanding

Even imaginings
become real after
time…
…you did

You found
in my fantasy
a decision to see
if a bubble
were to burst,

would either
of us

still exist…

It shows deep wisdom and a true ability with words.....the result...a beautifully written piece of work.  

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

Cpat Hair
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8 posted 2002-03-27 06:09 PM


ah... I see you are consistantly good...

Nice, a lucid dreaming feel to this used very well in the communication of your idea..

I enjoyed

Interloper
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Deep in the heart
9 posted 2002-03-28 10:32 AM


WONDERFUL!
HOORAH!
This is FABULOUS!
Oh, I, uh ... should say I like it, too

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

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