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Adolescence |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia 
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A flower grew to beauty, to its elegance and bloom From seed to poppy standing tall, from cute to strange too soon From an infant needing constant care, to a person full of go To one who listened when we spoke, to one we just don’t know What turns that person that we know, to one of stranger’s way? What turns our time from easy, to another bloody day? Does a time clock beacon waking to the child who comes to age? Injecting some strange chemistry, to start another stage Where once a job was done within an hour, day or so The room that once was nice and neat, to pigsty more does grow The words I love you, although few, now never seem to come Raise your kid to teenage years and wonder what you’ve done The puberty, the privacy, the phone calls and the lies Is hard on all the family and a sin when mother cries Do you remember teenage years? Do you remember fun? I bet you don’t remember when the days back then were done I’m sure you thought that life was great and mum and dad a bore Nothing like a pile of mates and things to do galore The parties and the girls or boys, the flirting, hours late When life was just the greatest thing and time was just your mate When we had no thought of growing old, just years of friends and time When mum and dad bought everything, before we earned a dime We all have different memories, but when parents see the truth That teenage years come all too soon as children lose their youth We learn to wait with patience, to let the stage just go Cos soon enough they’ll be adults and find out what we know |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"When life was just the greatest thing and time was just your mate" "When we had no thought of growing old, just years of friends and time When mum and dad bought everything, before we earned a dime" "We all have different memories, but when parents see the truth That teenage years come all too soon as children lose their youth" I enjoy your writing so very much Rick. This was wonderful ... so full of wisdom and depth. You've captured these scenes so perfectly, and injected such a wise and knowing understanding throughout. Amazing how we see our thoughts mirrored in the next generation. Beautifully written!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
Wow! This is terrific! A great description of one of life's most challenging periods. ((Rick)) -newell Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
You described life well Rick..nicely penned..i think raising my teenagers was certainly harder than when i was a teenager..so many more things to contend with today..enjoyed reading ~Victoria
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Rick, You covered the subject pretty well and did a nice job. Enjoyed |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Couldn't have done it better myself, and I'm just leaving that stage. Well done! I am a rabid horse. |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
There is a growth of understanding here, as the older ones struggle to remember what it was ALL like, and not just their selected rememberings... very good Rick... |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Rick,I like this a lot. I remember well, my teenage years, and now, many moons later my Mom says I changed from a sweet wonderful child to a horror, in the space of a year. Geez,I thought I was always fine. I also remember my daugters teenage years, with a pain in my stomach. Sandra |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
How well you have captured the innocent rain to torrent storm conversion... and how I understood every single word. Strength to you. Excellent ThisDiamond |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
So true when we did find out what our elders knew...I recall it all the good and the bad, well done but you might consider building stanzas of 4 lines from this..just an idea  [This message has been edited by ecrivan (03-18-2002 09:28 PM).] |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Rick Your double-lined entries set apart some glowing zenlike ideas. When they are older, and the parables taught echo in their ears as real events, they will know that we spoke from our heart of hearts. And that we offered the very best of our own experiences. Really an outstanding write, great flow, and wonderful word combo's! Hats off to you, Rick! Jeff |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Dear Kit, I am happy that you enjoy my writing as I do truly enjoy yours, thank you so very much for your reply. Dear SIlver Streak, thank you for you great comments, it is a time we all go through one way or the other, thanks for your reply. Dear Victoria, it is certainly not an easy time, but one we will all get through some how and look back on, thanks for your reply. Dear Seymour Tabin, thanks for your comment and reply. Dear Skyfire, welcome to the adult years, I hope that you had a great time growing up and will have learnt from all your mistakes on the way and share them with you children one day. Thanks from the reply. Dear Soleil Noir, the thoughts come from the meeting and the interaction of teenages, my daughter is just 11, but well on the way to being twenty. Thanks from the reply. Catalinamoon, Dear Sandra I think we thought we did no wrong in our growing up years, but others see those times differently, but we don't need to hear that. Thanks for your reply. Dear ThisDiamond, thanks for your encouraging words, it is nice to have some one on the same wave lenght. Thanks for the reply. Dear ecrivan, thanks for your reply, I will take note of your comment and see how I go. Thanks for sharing your ideas with me. Dear ShadowRider, Jeff, thank you for your wonderful words of complement, I hope that I can share more of my work with you all. Thanks for your reply. To you all, you all make this website my number one favorite, thank you all for taking the time to read my words and comment on them, it is much appreciated and enjoyed. Sincerely Rick. |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Rick Everything I have read from you speaks so many truths and makes one think. I am in awe at your writing ability and I apologise for replying to these poems all at once but I found that they were too good to just stop at one and now I'm hooked. I'll be looking forward to reading more from you. Take care......Sue Suetang |
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