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Magnus
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0 posted 2002-03-17 08:45 PM


My longest day would become but a second
compared to this day if I ever lost you..
Life as lived would cease..
Torment’s tentacles would entangle me
as seeds of hell were planted.

Dark of night would blind me
as the reaper’s door closed behind.
Tears flowing in a endless torrent
wash away my eyes.

Screams of agony, stifled by bit lips
would echo within my being
as despair overflowed from the
well , and my will drowned.

Love's whispery shadow
would not grace my door again.


© Copyright 2002 Barry J. Tackett - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-03-17 08:52 PM



You musn't do this...making the Sun shine tears....

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2 posted 2002-03-17 08:56 PM


Oh Magnus, I truely hope this never happens to you.
Magnus
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3 posted 2002-03-17 09:05 PM


It has been that kind of day for me..Kinda
ragged...

Wipe thy tears from beauty
for the shine of sun beams
Fret not thy maid I beg thee
For tis only in worst of dreams

Thank You KJ

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4 posted 2002-03-17 09:07 PM


Smart Chick.....ME TOOOO!!!!...For on that
day a shattered heart shall bleed endless
tears upon the floor of life...

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5 posted 2002-03-17 09:31 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Barry, I too hope this will never happen to you, sweet friend, you deserve the greatest love and happiness forever and ever and we all wish this for you! (sigh) This is sad but beautiful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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6 posted 2002-03-17 09:42 PM


Oh Barry...I hope this isn't about something real for you...
It is beautiful...but heartwrenching.

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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7 posted 2002-03-17 10:33 PM


Always true artistry in the expression of our greatest joys and deepests sorrows...
But the expression of our fears are the very shields that we shapen to meet them face to face. Well done archer! ThisDiamond

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8 posted 2002-03-17 10:40 PM


Magnus darling boy oh how utterly unbearable is the pain written in this. If this should ever happen to you I know that your soul would bleed for eternity. How heart wrenching this is, you’ve written the pain of this soooooo well. Don’t ever lose her or yourself darling man, for where would we be without your wonderful poetry

Take heart, there's light it beckons go forward to your destined fate, where you shine, I know it I


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy



To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79

[This message has been edited by Marsha (03-18-2002 11:08 AM).]

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9 posted 2002-03-17 11:06 PM


Wonderful Barry!  Deep, achingly sad, full of longing....well done!  Hugs.

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

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10 posted 2002-03-17 11:16 PM


Good expression Magnus...James
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11 posted 2002-03-18 10:37 AM


Love's whispery shadow
would not grace my door again.


I love the ending...darkly romantic..so beautiful..and i loved the whole poem barry...hugs

        ~Victoria~


"If music be the food of love, play on."  (William Shakespeare)



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12 posted 2002-03-18 11:07 AM


Magnus,
What is lost can be found. Enjoyed the write.

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I know this feeling. Have you heard the saying that I want to live with you forever, and die one minute before you?
Beautiful love shining here.
Sandra

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