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GenXer
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since 2001-12-15

Posts 583
USA

0 posted 2002-03-16 11:43 AM

My smile waits for my lips
to rise above my etched frown,
to take part in changing seasons,
and to never again come down

My stomach waits for laughter
to blossom inside of me,
to be touched by fluttering wings
that will tickle me endlessly

But I’m left to touch liquid ghosts
that fall from these lonely eyes
Haunting is their eerie descent
amidst my constant, somber sighs

They traverse down to my lips
Their salty taste, a reminder
of the love I let slip away,
and of the life in which I squander

[This message has been edited by GenXer (03-16-2002 11:48 AM).]

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

1 posted 2002-03-16 11:46 AM

GenXer,
A very nice write. Enjoyed

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2002-03-16 11:48 AM

"But I’m left to touch liquid ghosts
that fall from these lonely eyes
Haunting is their eerie descent
amidst my constant, somber sighs"

this touches me....
(((hugs))) for you

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2002-03-16 11:55 AM

GREAT title...

Marsha

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since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

4 posted 2002-03-16 12:00 PM

Dave darling boy this is utterly utterly wonderful writing. As always your words are filled with a certain quality that is unique to you. I can feel those tears darling heart, that is the most telling description of tears Liquid Ghosts. Superb darling boy utterly superb, I keep telling you darling boy to banish those tears, you know I absolutely detest crying, it makes me look blotchy.

How about a bit of steam darling boy, will that help clear the liquid ghosts?

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

5 posted 2002-03-16 12:20 PM

My stomach waits for laughter
to blossom inside of me,
to be touched by fluttering wings
that will tickle me endlessly

i love this and it is soooo true..i know
these feelings well Dave..lovely

~Victoria~

GenXer
Senior Member

since 2001-12-15

Posts 583
USA

6 posted 2002-03-16 12:54 PM

Seymour, Susan, Victoria, Karilea, and Marsha, thansks for reading.

And Marsha, it just might.

Dave

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

7 posted 2002-03-16 02:10 PM

"They traverse down to my lips
Their salty taste, a reminder
of the love I let slip away,
and of the life in which I squander"

(big hugggsssssss) Oh David, this is so very sad, my heart goes out to you, for I too know these feelings very much, while I know I must go on, I reflect upon the torments of my youth and I can't help but tear up every time I think of it! (sad sigh) This is sad but wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet David, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Zinsser
Senior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

8 posted 2002-03-16 02:50 PM

But I’m left to touch liquid ghosts
that fall from these lonely eyes
Haunting is their eerie descent
amidst my constant, somber sighs

They traverse down to my lips
Their salty taste, a reminder
of the love I let slip away,
and of the life in which I squander
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
beautiful write... so very sad
Hope all is well....
Connie

strbbux
Member Elite

since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

9 posted 2002-03-16 02:52 PM

"But I’m left to touch liquid ghosts
that fall from these lonely eyes
Haunting is their eerie descent
amidst my constant, somber sighs'

Hmm this is lovely, a sad poem, really, and Dave you haven't squandered your life, I mean, You have been writing beautiful poetry for us all to enjoy. Now that is not squandering. It is spreading happiness. thanks for this one. Made me think. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

[This message has been edited by strbbux (03-16-2002 02:54 PM).]

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

10 posted 2002-03-16 11:32 PM

I loved the way you used language in this one. A quiet, longing, sadness comes from it.

Nan

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

11 posted 2002-03-17 12:43 PM

Your words are lucid and transparent...ones I can most certainly relate to, the feeling of being so close and yet so far away.
Reminded me of seeing through the ripples underwater.

Nice writing~

Krissy
Senior Member

since 2002-02-22

Posts 556
kent England

12 posted 2002-03-17 06:58 PM

Dave Hi there, Make way mum for the younger prettier model This is a wonderful poem Dave a perfect description of that longing sadness, liquid ghosts. Don’t take any notice of mum Dave, I’d help you chase those ghosts away much quicker than she would After all who wouldn’t prefer the younger racier model?

This is a very well written and excellent piece of writing. You know I’m only teasing mum of course

Love and warm stuff
As always
Krissy

And while thy willing soul transpiers
at every pore with instant fires
Andrew Marvell 1621-1678

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

13 posted 2002-03-17 07:36 PM

Beautifully done, Dave...but please don't squander your life....it goes fast!

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Tracey
Member Elite

since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

14 posted 2002-03-18 12:27 PM

When I read the title, my first thought was “damn, these green beers are going to come back to haunt me”!!!. But, of course, your poem goes much deeper than that (okay, it’s only me that’s this shallow!! Lol)
Love that last verse

They traverse down to my lips
Their salty taste, a reminder
of the love I let slip away,
and of the life in which I squander

Wow, how true. How often do we let love slip away, and squander life? You’ve made me think of my own life…maybe in a different perspective.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

15 posted 2002-03-18 02:29 PM

It doesn't get any easier as one gets older. GenX. It's good to write about them, though. Helps some.

Take care,

Cor

Dee
Member Elite

since 2000-08-19

Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia

16 posted 2002-03-18 04:04 PM

David, I guess, like everyone else, this touched my heart. Such sad beauty. A must for my library, I feel.

Dee

I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand

Ivy Rose
Senior Member

since 2001-12-29

Posts 1300
MA, USA

17 posted 2002-03-18 06:15 PM

Sad;yet brilliantly penned. GenXer...Hope your heart is touched by love again and that your life becomes a joy to live.

***Ivy Rose

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