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Reconstructing Susan
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Reconstructing Susan |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you 
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They took from her of her what they needed without a thought or care to how they left the structure of her Through words she would heal and try to repair the breaks the tears, try to fill the voids left empty abandoned Sometimes there were no words that could back fill the empty no flowers she could paint to stop the erosion of her Yes, there were the words of self destruction creating raw emotions hoping only to feel something anything if only for a while But the sad realization is that they are only words and they cannot always build upon the foundation that has been damaged by the quaking by the taking of her Words cannot replace love respect and the nurturing that she just might need for herself Cannot return the emotions needed for surviving the without the lonely the ache in her Yet she clings to the words as her tears make their way down and her pen moves in frantic scrawl hoping to find the right words to once again make her whole ~SEA~ [This message has been edited by SEA (03-16-2002 02:07 AM).] |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
This is sad Sea, and so well written, nice work. floria Floria |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Susan, I can feel a cry for help and tears in these words, sweet friend, I hope everything is alright, we are all here for you always if you ever need someone to talk to, I hgope you find all the words your heart desires and all your questions and loneliness will be answered by His love! (kiss on cheek) My heart goes out to you, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Susan, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (03-15-2002 09:21 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I feel the strength behind the write...it is not every one who is willing to be rebuilt, or would have the guts to show the world the result... I am so very proud of you! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sea What an intense and emotive poem...so well written You used such heart to write it..it hurt to read. Hugs! |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Words cannot replace love Yet we settle. Why? |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Dear Susan, your words made me sob. I don't know if it was the erosion, the quaking or the acheing, or perhaps the way your pen scrowled down an all too familiar page. It is human nature to want our love to be recipricated, and it is heart breaking when we realize they are just words on a screen... To this day I wonder how and why we let them effect us so deeply. It makes no sense to me. I wouldn't have wanted to miss reading this for the world, as it makes me feel less alone, although I am sorry to be keeping you company in your misery. Wish I could just turn the page and never look back!! Dayummmmmmm!!! *hugs* dear heart~ |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Susan, Well...these words won't rebuild Susan either! I'm sad to confess. But if that were possible I would craft those words right here and right now. Yet I am hoping that some words will be a tool in the rebuilding of you. You are indeed an inspiring poet whose romantic quill fills my heart with much warmth and I'd like to give some of that back now...okay?  Everybody thinks of changing humanity and nobody thinks of changing himself. Leo Tolstoy |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Susan, This is so sad  I hope everything is ok with you Hugs, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Wow Sue, I felt like the oceans were eroding all of the worlds shores from this...certainly a powerful poem....tons of feelings... |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Seems to me like that structure looks pretty good!  Words can do that to one, can't they, SEA> |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
painful...... real.... and very sad.... my heart feels each word as if i wrote them myself |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
The courage to determine what is broken, become the healing words... As always, very well done. ThisDiamond |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Yet she clings to the words as her tears make their way down and her pen moves in frantic scrawl hoping to find the right words to once again make her whole =============================== "desperately seeking Susan" seems to me ...youre half way there... and along the way...you discovered the poet. ditto what Sun said...adding moth admiration You never knew what I loved in you, |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Susan, I understand these words very well and find the poem powerful in its intent. Well done, my sweetie. (((hugs))) Michael Stars will shine when I am gone |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Good heavens above, woman!! *S* Like doreen said... I felt every word... painfully and powerfully. This is a tower of strength built from the rubble of "was"... and lady, it's beautiful. *S* Sometimes there were no words that could back fill the empty But you've found your voice... and filled our hearts. Words cannot replace But they can make a difference... yours do. Into my library this goes. *S* |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Yes, there were the words of self destruction creating raw emotions hoping only to feel something anything if only for a while Susan - I know of what you speak. So very sad, yet so good. I know you offer me those hugs all the time. I've been saving them, so here is one of them back.  Dave |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Susan this one hit home in such a huge way. i felt your words my dear friend as tears streamed down my face...you have such a loving heart and i adore both you and your writing...passions wouldn't be the same without you. we all love you very much, and i know that right now your heart is in pain and you feel lost, but hang in there...tomorrow may be the day when your sun shines again. till then you're in my thoughts and prayers. love ya sweets. amy "you can't stop |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Yet she clings to the words as her tears make their way down and her pen moves in frantic scrawl hoping to find the right words to once again make her whole ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Sue, I have no idea how I missed this one, but I am sure glad it is back up here now for me to read... and lock away in my library! Some pretty strong feelings here from a very strong woman! Incredible words and thoughts here Sue. ~Hugs, Nancy~ *Thanks for your help in finding that site for me today* |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
A powerful, honest write. I felt your words. Now I have a favourite of yours. Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice writing Sea...James |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
In the end, always, there are the words. And they are who we are, and yet, we are who they are. In this, my friend, is our strength, and our foundation. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
You are a true poet in every sense of the word, Sue... This is a heartbreaking write...but oh so very beautiful.  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I don't know what to say but thank you all so much for caring...... your sweet words help heal when others use words to hurt, to take.... thank you all so much. and Amy you are wonderful, thank you. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I'm sorry. |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
PS, thank you |
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NapalmsConstantlyConfused
since 2001-05-15
Posts 529 |
they tried their best to dehumanize they tried their best to demoralize but all they did was energize your star will rise fall into the skies when you learn to realize you win the prize friends more your size when they try to terrorize is when you need to fantasize see places they can't minimize they hide away in deep, deep sighs try to sneak in in disguise but your heart YOU supervise, and this will only make you wise, and less easy to compromise with amazon cries you block their eyes and don't stop to let them criticize. so there. -Dave |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Sea if Sunshine wasn't my sunshine you would be, always my ray of sweets words in my email box! Sea, you have done a wonderful job of putting Susan-dumpty almost back together again, and just by readng this healing poem, you have to sense, inner strength and fortitude to finish the job and be all the better for it. Think back on an email you sent me not too long ago about "all" the kids and how they felt because of him, well honey I should have said it to you then, that it is because of you too. I've only been here a year, and the change I have seen in one year astounds me, and in case I never told you before Susan, "I love everthing about you and am so proud of what you have done for you!" (one day the hug is going to be a real one, but today it is a virtual hearthug of understanding and love) x o The pursuit of truth and beauty is a sphere of activity in which we are permitted to remain children all our lives. |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
thank you Dave, that was awesome |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Sharon, you aren't kidding about that hug, one day, it will be real. thank you so much!!!!! love ya. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Susan, I've come back to read this over again and it touches me even deeper the second time. You should be very proud of this write as I am proud of you for allowing the emotions to pour out. I relate very much to this, it really is your best... I'm keeping this one! "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Melissa, high praise from you  thank you...I suppose I should spill it more often really thank you so much |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
 Oh wow....~ Titus "My body is merely the canvas of my soul." |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
This is an amazing reconstruction Sea. I would have copied my favourite parts, but, I would have had to copy the whole poem. Fantastic writing. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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