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Titia Geertman
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0 posted 2002-03-14 08:26 PM



it's raining and I'm sitting here
it seems that I am stuck you see
no use today for my cutting gear
it's always raining when I am free

it seems that I am stuck you see
so I must do some other chores
it's always raining when I am free
okay, okay I'll scrub the floors

so I must do some other chores
hey, I know where I'd rather be
okay, okay I'll scrub the floors
let the housewife in me free

hey, I know where I'd rather be
so this is what I'm going to do
let the housewife in me free
and then I'll write a poem for you

so this is what I'm going to do
I'll scrub the floors untill they shine
and then I'll write a poem for you
while I am sipping a glass of wine

I'll scrub the floors untill they shine
no use today for my cutting gear
while I am sipping a glass of wine
it's raining and I'm sitting here

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Check out my new website: lookheretitia.fcpages.com (I didn't 'link' this, so it won't take too much space).I

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1 posted 2002-03-14 08:42 PM



Titia!  This is perfect!  You rounded everything out quite well and brought in tight up back to the beginning!  I've got a lot to learn from you!

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2 posted 2002-03-14 08:45 PM


Titia, this is fantastic. I love the Pantoum and I love down to earth every day poems that speak of real life. And you do both well. Thanks for sharing.

((Titia))
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3 posted 2002-03-14 08:56 PM




BRAVO!!! Oh my gosh, this is absolutely wonderful, I just love the rhythm of this, this is by far one of your best yet! (kiss on cheek) I think we all have days like this eevry now and then, dearest friend, may the spring come and make everyday magic for you! We all love you so much, sweet friend, kudos to you! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Titia, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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4 posted 2002-03-14 08:57 PM


LOL - Can't be clipping the sheep on a rainy day.. but you surely can clean the house with a wine chaser...Too cute...

You're great, Titia..

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5 posted 2002-03-14 09:13 PM


You are an amazing lady, Titia! This is brilliant work.....you took such common, uninteresting chores and created an excellent poem from them...I love it!
Titia Geertman
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6 posted 2002-03-15 07:52 PM


Thank you so much dear friends.

Ha ha I started to write the poem, never got to scrubbing the floors LOL

I'm not much of a housewife I must say.
Just got back from a sheepmeeting. I had to drive 5 hours forth and back and talked two.

First male lamb will be called Balladeer.
I'm just sitting here and waiting and the ewes grow fatter each day. Any moment now.

Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Check out my new website: lookheretitia.fcpages.com (I didn't 'link' this, so it won't take too much space).I

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