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You Wrote the Words I Needed to Say(repost)
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You Wrote the Words I Needed to Say(repost) |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You wrote the words I needed to say in the poem you posted yesterday I read them as I was passing through marveling at what those words could do A memory surfaced in that short time the moment it took to read your rhyme A vision of you, dressed all in black; a flower for me, held behind your back My prom dress, pink organza and lace curls framing my beaming face Life was simpler at seventeen before we saw all the things we’d seen Then there was war and protestations love ins, peace outs and incantations Children born, grew up, left home and there we were, all alone But your head was turned one last time she wooed you away with silken rhyme Words you claimed I never said touches missed in the marriage bed You stormed out to join your new love in a place in Ohio, I’d never heard of Being without you, I found my peace based upon your act of release I know the lies you hold as true are lies that she had fed to you And now you write your poet's plea that life is sad without a ‘you and me’ Ten years passed since you left this place Now I find tears drying upon my face Just fancy seeing your words today you wrote the words I needed to say. |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
Awe, sad. Quite an engaging narration. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well that was rhyme deVine, poetess DeVine, and a sad story well told indeed. I thoroughly enjoyed both the rhyme and it held my interest and empathy right to the end. Glad you re-posted it as I had never seen it before, thanks Sharon. The pursuit of truth and beauty is a sphere of activity in which we are permitted to remain children all our lives. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
You captured a lot of emotion in this piece Sharon, a powerful write indeed, well done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is a sad and universal anomaly of marriage, PdV... You speak for many with these words...Well done.. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"I know the lies you hold as true are lies that she had fed to you And now you write your poet's plea that life is sad without a ‘you and me’ Ten years passed since you left this place Now I find tears drying upon my face Just fancy seeing your words today you wrote the words I needed to say."  (big hugggsssssss) Oh Sharon, this is so very sad, my heart goes out to you and the tears of lost marriage in these words, dearest friend, my heart goes out to you and I hope now everything is alright! (sigh) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is sa dbut well-written! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sharon, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you for you kind comments. But like a lot of my work, this is fiction!!  |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
ahh - but there's truth in all fiction Sharon. still, i think the sentiment of this is one many can understand if not directly relate to. hugs C |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
But your head was turned one last time she wooed you away with silken rhyme Words you claimed I never said touches missed in the marriage bed Oh man, does this hit home! Well done. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like this so much, PDV... it's a beautiful heart-tugger. *S* As for the title... you do that all the time... and I thank you. *S* |
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