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Suetang
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0 posted 2002-03-13 08:55 PM


I walk these streets alone at night
No longer do I feel the cold
But the thing I mostly crave
Are two arms for me to hold

I've lived this miserable life
For the past three years
Now my make up doesn't hide
My sadness and my tears

As a teenager I was pretty
With my whole life ahead of me
Now my friends fail to recognise
This person I've come to be

I pushed them all away
As they tried to shelter me from harm
A constant reminder of my stubbornness
Are these needlemarks in my arm

Back then I was invincible
No one could tell me what to do
But in the stillness of the night
It is my friends I reach out to

But they cannot hear my cries
In the middle of the night
As I search around helplessly
Trying to find my guiding light

The men who come to use me
They're only good for my next fix
As they pay me many dollars
To perform their sordid tricks

I lie empty on the bed
After they've had their way with me
And wonder if they have a daughter
Who'd be the same age as me?

Now I stand on these stilettos
And walk this godforesaken place
As I'm dreaming of a better life
A lonely tear travels down my face

Suetang

© Copyright 2002 Sue Tancheff - All Rights Reserved
Larry C
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1 posted 2002-03-13 09:13 PM


Sue,
Okay...you know how to make me uncomfortable. But such tragedy exists. Well done.

Everybody thinks of changing humanity and nobody thinks of changing himself. Leo Tolstoy

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2 posted 2002-03-13 09:16 PM


Sue...you made me cry....darn...

Darn it...  It is too real...  and I feel
the pain right now...

Thank you for this ...  shoot...I am still
crying...

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3 posted 2002-03-13 09:26 PM




(tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Sue, this is so very sad, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you and your tears and I pray with all my heart that now you surrounded by many that love you, just as we all do so so much! (kiss on cheek) My heart goes out to you, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sue, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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4 posted 2002-03-13 09:36 PM


Sue, you did a beautiful job with this sordid tale. You made it seem so real. What a great job of a very sad situation. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

[This message has been edited by strbbux (03-13-2002 09:37 PM).]

butterflykiss989
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5 posted 2002-03-14 12:09 PM


Wow.. this one hits close to home I have friends who went down this road and reading this brings to the surface any and all pain I felt then and still feel now.. This was damn good.

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6 posted 2002-03-14 12:35 PM


You did an excellent job of depicting the lonely and empty road bad decisions like this have on far too many young people.  It is a cold world out there when you are on the outside having made a bad choice.  Extremely well done Sue, I certainly commend you for taking on a challenging topic and doing it well.

The pursuit of truth and beauty is a sphere of activity in which we are permitted to remain children all our lives.
  ~* Albert Einstein *~

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7 posted 2002-03-14 09:14 AM


such a painful path to walk in life....
excellent writing

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8 posted 2002-03-14 12:43 PM


enjoyed
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9 posted 2002-03-14 01:08 PM


Sue - this is a wonderful piece of work which made me count my blessings. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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