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Pilgrimage
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0 posted 2002-03-13 01:02 PM



I met a yellow butterfly today;
she floated down the same path that I walked.
Although she didn't have a lot to say,
I liked the way she flirted when I talked.

She didn't stay too long, we didn't bond.
Bright butterflies are made that way, you know.
It's not that they don't want us to be fond,
it's simply love takes too much time to grow.

Young butterflies don't have the time to spend;
sweet nectar calls them on to brighter blooms.
This painted girl will be your dearest friend
until she smells a heady new perfume.

Don't blame a butterfly for being weak,
when empty prettiness is all we seek.


Nan

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1 posted 2002-03-13 01:10 PM




(smiles) Awwwwwww, this is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I love butterflies so so much and I was so happy to see a tiger swallowtail in my backyard yesterday, it was sooooo cute! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is gorgeous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Nancy, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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2 posted 2002-03-13 01:12 PM


Nan darling girl this is awesome, I mean it, this is an incredible piece of writing, utterly utterly amazing writing it’s so full of beauty and is utterly divine.

And the truth rings through this diamond like a loud klaxon, it is all we can expect from life if we seek empty prettiness. I am of course a perfect butterfly, prettish, very empty headed and float about a lot not doing a lot Ask keth she’ll tell you

You always excel in this you’ve proved, if it needed it, that you are an exceptional writer. And this is an absolutely beautiful and perfect example of all your posts, perfect

  
Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79


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3 posted 2002-03-13 01:20 PM


She didn't stay too long, we didn't bond.
Bright butterflies are made that way, you know.
It's not that they don't want us to be fond,
it's simply love takes too much time to grow.
============================

this is so lovely in its carefree cadence with its poetic intend wrapped in butterfly imagery.
Wonderful write Poetess

You never knew what I loved in you,
I dont know what you loved in me ...
Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be.

Jackson Browne

Pilgrimage
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4 posted 2002-03-13 01:20 PM


Dear Noah,
Thank you. I saw my first yellow butterfly of Spring in the park yesterday, and had most of this written in my head before i got home. I love butterflies.

Dear Marsha,
I love butterflies, maybe that explains my affection for you! You go ahead and flutter about, dear one, and I'll enjoy watching you.

Nan

Pilgrimage
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5 posted 2002-03-13 01:22 PM


Dear Janet Marie,
I'm glad you liked it-I love to watch butterflies and hummingbirds and all of Nature's pretties.

Nan

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6 posted 2002-03-13 01:45 PM



What a wise and lovely sonnet! You used a favourite theme of mine to convey your message

It's a keeper for sure!

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

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7 posted 2002-03-13 03:07 PM


Pilgrimage~
You floated through the thoughts with ease~
As beautifully flitted as your 'inspire'~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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8 posted 2002-03-13 03:12 PM


HOORAY!
This is a keeper for sure.
Going in my library.
Sucked me right in and kayoed me at the end!
Well done!

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

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9 posted 2002-03-13 04:13 PM


Dear Melissa,
Thank you-we butterfly lovers must stick together. No, that would be messy, wouldn't it? Glad you liked the sonnet.

Dear Marge,
I couldn't have a better inspiration. I'm glad you thought I did it justice.

Dear Interloper,
Kayoed you at the end? Thanks!

Nan

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10 posted 2002-03-13 05:02 PM


Nan, two of my favourites here - butterflies and sonnets. How could I resist? I can imagine you walking along talking to a butterfly. What a lovely thought and poem.

Dee

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Pilgrimage
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11 posted 2002-03-13 05:16 PM


Dear Dee,
Thanks!

Nan

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12 posted 2002-03-13 06:14 PM


Nan dear girl. I love sonnets and have been working on them, and you did this so well. what a wonderful subject. loved it. floria

Floria

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But die with all their music in them"
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13 posted 2002-03-13 06:28 PM


enjoyed
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14 posted 2002-03-13 06:46 PM


Nan hi there, NOW this is REAL POETRY, I like this a lot well written and beautiful in it’s melodic way. Isn’t it just like my mum to get to your writing first? This is very beautiful but then I knew it would be special since you wrote it and you are an excellent writer


Love and warm stuff
As always
Krissy

And while thy willing soul transpiers
at every pore with instant fires
Andrew Marvell 1621-1678

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15 posted 2002-03-13 11:22 PM


Nan - I liked the analogy you drew between some people's shallow obsession with beauty and not brains, or inner beauty, like myself.lol  But did you have to use the poor butterfly to make your point.   Nicely done.

Dave  

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16 posted 2002-03-14 10:00 AM


Dear Floria,
Ever since I discovered that sonnets weren't just something Shakespeare wrote, I've loved doing them.

Dear Vandana,
Thank you for reading and taking the time to let me know you enjoyed it.

Dear Krissy,
Well, it's a sonnet, anyway. Glad you liked it.

Dear Dave,
But the butterfly didn't object-I asked her and she just fluttered a bit.  Okay, she then flew away toward a flower(weed), so I thought the subject was closed.

Nan

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