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mirror man
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0 posted 2002-03-13 02:17 AM










the key


And we came upon the
castle of love,
all about which walked
the shadows of lovers,

such as
Heloise and Abelard,
Tristan and Isolde,
Juliet and Romeo,
and many others.

And a sign
which read:

Should on this path appear desire
as a light upon the past
and thereby reading sight be cast
on ancient deeds transpired,

would that black fire bleed on this place
a shadow to survive,
brand in stone the urge to live,
or burn this hand in space?

Others have loved so many ways
as one would strike the dawn,
behold the light on meadowed lawns
and sing of rainbow rays.

What comes what may, we suppose, yet
have we seen the measure
of both night and day, and regret
both lost and found pleasure.

Were there a test for love pinned down to these
shadows of joy, some spark of true knowledge
that one might grasp and say Yes, this is Love
and no other, we would not find by count
the number of all failures equaling
even one.  Gush if you like, speak of days
to come in gaudy colors, or tell me
of your shocking lust, or speak of reason,
verbose purity, the one logic of true love,

we have seen
many assault these walls with love
in one form or another.
You may count the winners in shadows
of the key.

text and music by mirror man
copyright 2002




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1 posted 2002-03-13 03:29 AM


Wow this is such a wonderful poem, I love the imagery and the language you have used really captured my attention and made me want to read more, thank you for sharing this wonderful poem

Andrew

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mirror man
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2 posted 2002-03-13 07:12 AM


Andrew -- thank you very much.  I am glad you enjoyed.
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3 posted 2002-03-13 07:13 AM



A wonderful read, and I shall be back to take it in again, as well as enjoy the music!

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4 posted 2002-03-13 07:20 AM


Sunshine -- thank you very much.  Yes, come back and listen to the music; it is as much a part of the work as the poem.  
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5 posted 2002-03-13 10:01 AM


MirrorMan~
WOW !
The poem is stunning - it's meaning clearly defined~
The music is stirring - tempo is perfect for the piece~
You are so talented !

'we have seen
many assault these walls with love
in one form or another.
You may count the winners in shadows
of the key.'


Just 'amening' here~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~



~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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mirror man
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6 posted 2002-03-13 05:25 PM


Marge -- thank you very much.  It's very difficult to get the two together well, and I appreciate your taking the time for both.  Thank you again.  
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7 posted 2002-03-13 06:58 PM




WOW!!! Ooohhhhhhh...I just love how you present your poems always, both your words and the music is fabulous, yes, may we all treat the walls of love with loving care and hang all our memories gently upon our heart! (smiles) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is excellent! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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8 posted 2002-03-13 07:07 PM


Noah -- thank you very much, and I appreciate your seeing this in such a positive way.  Thanks again.
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9 posted 2002-03-13 07:28 PM


mirror man

I really enjoy your writing and music, and yes you are talented.  


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10 posted 2002-03-13 07:53 PM


Martie -- thank you.  I'm never sure how to respond.  I guess I just don't want to gush.  (aw shucks).  I'm repeating myself.
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11 posted 2002-03-13 09:36 PM


quote:
yet
have we seen the measure
of both night and day, and regret
both lost and found pleasure.


Sums up the entirety for me. i didn't check out the music (cause i don't have speakers hooked up) but the poem was well worth it.

Christopher

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12 posted 2002-03-14 03:49 AM


Christopher -- thank you.  Don't have speakers?  The thought never occurred to me, but yes, audio on the web seems to be something recent.  Thank you.
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13 posted 2002-03-14 07:13 AM



As promised, I revisited to read along with the music, and then this line stuck out because of it...
quote:
Gush if you like, speak of days
to come in gaudy colors, or tell me
of your shocking lust, or speak of reason,
verbose purity, the one logic of true love,



Please, never take your talents from Passions...they are far too enjoyable...

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