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Janet Marie
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Promised Sky


She sat between his bent knees
on the grassy bank at the water's edge.
His arms wrapped around her waist as
she leaned back in contentment's rest
against the quiet calm of his chest,
holding hands, fingers laced.

Sated by the sun's warm silence,
each knew what the other was thinking.
In too few hours, the same linen sky that they
sat beneath, would carry him away.
For now, they would share the same breath
and try to slow time.

The sun danced with the wind on the
lake's mirrored surface, turning each
translucent ripple into diamond facets of light.
The same spark reflected in hushed tears
on flushed cheeks.

"I wanted to take you to the ocean" he whispered.
"I wanted to be the one to give that to you, to see
your face when you saw it for the first time.
Then, I wanted to see it through your eyes."

But time would not allow that wish
to be granted. For fall was fading.
Still, what had been shared, would not
ever allow winter's regret to set in.
He stood and held out his hand,
lifting her up to meet his waiting kiss.
A kiss that kept so many promises,
it changed the season, then set the sun.

He couldn't give her the ocean,
so instead he gave her the sky.


Janet Marie


     






[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (03-11-2002 07:27 AM).]

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All I can say is IT'S BEAUTIFUL!
It left a little lump in my throat, but it's a not a bad feeling. And it also felt like a warm hug on a cold night.
Duncan
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But time would not allow that wish
to be granted. For fall was fading.
Still, what had been shared, would not
ever allow winter's regret to set in.
He stood and held out his hand,
lifting her up to meet his waiting kiss.
A kiss that kept so many promises,
it changed the season, then set the sun.

He couldn't give her the ocean,
so instead he gave her the sky.

You know the saying, 'good things are worth waiting for'?  I think whoever first said that must have read your poetry.
The absolute fantasy like tone to this, yet it ends...they part.

Still, what had been shared, would not
ever allow winter's regret to set in.

That is one of the greatest lines I've ever read.  Maybe because it is so much more.

Thanks for this, JM.  I knew I was still awake for some reason!
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JM,
Awww dear friend...you touch my very soul. I am moved beyond words. Such emotions you reach within me. Thank you so much.  

Everybody thinks of changing humanity and nobody thinks of changing himself. Leo Tolstoy

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"A kiss that kept so many promises,
it changed the season, then set the sun.

He couldn't give her the ocean,
so instead he gave her the sky"


Janet, this is one of your best....now, you know that I love all of your poetry LOL
so it's hard to pick a favorite, but this is definately a top 3....*sigh* and then, *SIGH*
enchanting.....
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I love the way you write.  This is a touching, beautiful emote.  Everytime I read you, your words make me feel a part of what you live.  He also gives your pen it's magic

Take care ms. butterfly,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

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quote:
Still, what had been shared, would not
ever allow winter's regret to set in.
He stood and held out his hand,
lifting her up to meet his waiting kiss.
A kiss that kept so many promises,
it changed the season, then set the sun.


Oh, Heavy sigh    
quote:
He couldn't give her the ocean,
so instead he gave her the sky.


Oh, he gave her so much more.

JM, does a poem get more romantic than this? I don't think so.  Okay, I want this guy to come on back in a poem I am not finished reading yet LOL, can you do that muse baby?  This was so dreamy.


The pursuit of truth and beauty is a sphere of activity in which we are permitted to remain children all our lives.
  ~* Albert Einstein *~



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Sky is good, JM. I like sky!! Thank you for a piece of it...
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Janet,

    So beautiful and romantic I just love and enjoy your writing so much

Hugs,
Tara

"My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read"
     - Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home

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For now, they would share the same breath
and try to slow time.

I know this feeling, JM.

Your poem is exceptional in the feeling it conveys and in the way you string your words together....absolutely beautiful.

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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"He couldn't give her the ocean
so instead he gave her the sky."
James
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'She sat between his bent knees
on the grassy bank at the water's edge.
His arms wrapped around her waist as
she leaned back in contentment's rest
against the quiet calm of his chest,
holding hands, fingers laced.'

Hey, J...excellent write...BUT, be careful, 'cuz I think free verse is taking a liking to you... ...really, though...beautiful verse you've penned...flows like a classic JM...yaya I know I always say that... ...but glad you shared it...

k        

And though my heart feels all alone without you
I still hear you sing to me
I still hear your voice on the sea...

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"For now, they would share the same breath
and try to slow time. "

"A kiss that kept so many promises,
it changed the season, then set the sun."

Oh dear ... my first read of the morning gator gal, and you've got me all teary. The imagery of her resting back against him ... you captured it perfectly, then the words snuck up on me, until by the end, something just hurt so real ... I could feel it. Amazing the way you bring these feelings to other's minds through your words Janet Marie ... that is a wonderful talent. So beautifully written ...  

Best wishes,
/Kit

PS ... trying to sneak by on 12,000?  Congratulations in Announcements JM!  
http://piptalk.com/pip/Forum3/HTML/001643.html

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and just like the ocean the skies can be ominous, or beautiful, bringing peace and calm.  These words you give today are peaceful JM.  
beautiful write Janet.   Indeed lovely.  *s*

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

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I love this and your linen sky image...just beautiful  writing, JM
*s

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A prosey poem...now wouldn't one know, it would come straight from you...

thank you for this, little Moth...we've been in sore need of another one of your treasures...
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I love a positive message - and this is indeed uplifting... Simply and unequivocally wonderful, JM..
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JM,
Excellent is not a word for this poem for it is beyond that. But I am only a poor man with few words. Sy
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"He couldn't give her the ocean,
so instead he gave her the sky."




WOW!!! Oh my gosh, this one made me cry, it is sooooooooo beautiful, your words and visions always bring a smile to my face and has the ocean rising with inspiration and the sky swimming with light! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is awesome! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Janet, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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This is so beauitful. I love the sunset/sunrise. Thank you for sharing it.
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....MAGICAL !!....

Love this Janet Marie!  
Please may we have more?
~Smiles and Hugs, Nancy~

~Sometimes all you really wish for...
     is someone to wish for you.~

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Janet Marie

The exquisite deapth of love gleaming in your words is far better then any sky...for I think he gifted you with more then sky, he set your heart on fire.  Now that is a beautiful thing!
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He couldn't give her the ocean,
so instead he gave her the sky.

When we love someone, we want to give them everything their heart has ever wished for... because fulfilling their dreams is glimpsing heaven ourselves. *S* But that's not always possible.

He couldn't give the ocean... but what he gave isn't something she can only visit now and then... it's a gift to sustain her. The sky is with her every day... every night... as limitless as their love. It wraps her in warmth and amazes her with its beauty... a constant reminder that though he left, his love remains with her.

Beautiful work, JM. *S*
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Wow! This poem is beautiful and your photos make it even more beautiful.
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Ohhhhhhhhhh JanetMarie, this is goregous my goodness what a sweet write!
Another treasure4me2read in the many days ahead...
Hugs2uAlwaysDearPoetFriend
*~coco~*
 
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