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Janet Marie
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0 posted 2002-03-11 12:04 PM


     


Promised Sky


She sat between his bent knees
on the grassy bank at the water's edge.
His arms wrapped around her waist as
she leaned back in contentment's rest
against the quiet calm of his chest,
holding hands, fingers laced.

Sated by the sun's warm silence,
each knew what the other was thinking.
In too few hours, the same linen sky that they
sat beneath, would carry him away.
For now, they would share the same breath
and try to slow time.

The sun danced with the wind on the
lake's mirrored surface, turning each
translucent ripple into diamond facets of light.
The same spark reflected in hushed tears
on flushed cheeks.

"I wanted to take you to the ocean" he whispered.
"I wanted to be the one to give that to you, to see
your face when you saw it for the first time.
Then, I wanted to see it through your eyes."

But time would not allow that wish
to be granted. For fall was fading.
Still, what had been shared, would not
ever allow winter's regret to set in.
He stood and held out his hand,
lifting her up to meet his waiting kiss.
A kiss that kept so many promises,
it changed the season, then set the sun.

He couldn't give her the ocean,
so instead he gave her the sky.


Janet Marie


     






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1 posted 2002-03-11 12:14 PM


All I can say is IT'S BEAUTIFUL!
It left a little lump in my throat, but it's a not a bad feeling. And it also felt like a warm hug on a cold night.

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2 posted 2002-03-11 12:14 PM


But time would not allow that wish
to be granted. For fall was fading.
Still, what had been shared, would not
ever allow winter's regret to set in.
He stood and held out his hand,
lifting her up to meet his waiting kiss.
A kiss that kept so many promises,
it changed the season, then set the sun.

He couldn't give her the ocean,
so instead he gave her the sky.

You know the saying, 'good things are worth waiting for'?  I think whoever first said that must have read your poetry.
The absolute fantasy like tone to this, yet it ends...they part.

Still, what had been shared, would not
ever allow winter's regret to set in.

That is one of the greatest lines I've ever read.  Maybe because it is so much more.

Thanks for this, JM.  I knew I was still awake for some reason!

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3 posted 2002-03-11 12:18 PM


JM,
Awww dear friend...you touch my very soul. I am moved beyond words. Such emotions you reach within me. Thank you so much.  

Everybody thinks of changing humanity and nobody thinks of changing himself. Leo Tolstoy

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4 posted 2002-03-11 12:20 PM


"A kiss that kept so many promises,
it changed the season, then set the sun.

He couldn't give her the ocean,
so instead he gave her the sky"


Janet, this is one of your best....now, you know that I love all of your poetry LOL
so it's hard to pick a favorite, but this is definately a top 3....*sigh* and then, *SIGH*
enchanting.....

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5 posted 2002-03-11 12:20 PM



I love the way you write.  This is a touching, beautiful emote.  Everytime I read you, your words make me feel a part of what you live.  He also gives your pen it's magic

Take care ms. butterfly,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

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6 posted 2002-03-11 12:26 PM


quote:
Still, what had been shared, would not
ever allow winter's regret to set in.
He stood and held out his hand,
lifting her up to meet his waiting kiss.
A kiss that kept so many promises,
it changed the season, then set the sun.


Oh, Heavy sigh    
quote:
He couldn't give her the ocean,
so instead he gave her the sky.


Oh, he gave her so much more.

JM, does a poem get more romantic than this? I don't think so.  Okay, I want this guy to come on back in a poem I am not finished reading yet LOL, can you do that muse baby?  This was so dreamy.


The pursuit of truth and beauty is a sphere of activity in which we are permitted to remain children all our lives.
  ~* Albert Einstein *~



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7 posted 2002-03-11 12:32 PM


Sky is good, JM. I like sky!! Thank you for a piece of it...
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8 posted 2002-03-11 12:42 PM


Janet,

    So beautiful and romantic I just love and enjoy your writing so much

Hugs,
Tara

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     - Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home

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9 posted 2002-03-11 12:43 PM


For now, they would share the same breath
and try to slow time.

I know this feeling, JM.

Your poem is exceptional in the feeling it conveys and in the way you string your words together....absolutely beautiful.

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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10 posted 2002-03-11 01:53 AM


"He couldn't give her the ocean
so instead he gave her the sky."
James

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11 posted 2002-03-11 03:34 AM


'She sat between his bent knees
on the grassy bank at the water's edge.
His arms wrapped around her waist as
she leaned back in contentment's rest
against the quiet calm of his chest,
holding hands, fingers laced.'

Hey, J...excellent write...BUT, be careful, 'cuz I think free verse is taking a liking to you... ...really, though...beautiful verse you've penned...flows like a classic JM...yaya I know I always say that... ...but glad you shared it...

k        

And though my heart feels all alone without you
I still hear you sing to me
I still hear your voice on the sea...

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12 posted 2002-03-11 05:19 AM


"For now, they would share the same breath
and try to slow time. "

"A kiss that kept so many promises,
it changed the season, then set the sun."

Oh dear ... my first read of the morning gator gal, and you've got me all teary. The imagery of her resting back against him ... you captured it perfectly, then the words snuck up on me, until by the end, something just hurt so real ... I could feel it. Amazing the way you bring these feelings to other's minds through your words Janet Marie ... that is a wonderful talent. So beautifully written ...  

Best wishes,
/Kit

PS ... trying to sneak by on 12,000?  Congratulations in Announcements JM!  
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13 posted 2002-03-11 06:04 AM


and just like the ocean the skies can be ominous, or beautiful, bringing peace and calm.  These words you give today are peaceful JM.  
beautiful write Janet.   Indeed lovely.  *s*

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

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14 posted 2002-03-11 06:24 AM


I love this and your linen sky image...just beautiful  writing, JM
*s

M

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A prosey poem...now wouldn't one know, it would come straight from you...

thank you for this, little Moth...we've been in sore need of another one of your treasures...

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16 posted 2002-03-11 07:22 AM


I love a positive message - and this is indeed uplifting... Simply and unequivocally wonderful, JM..
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17 posted 2002-03-11 07:29 AM


JM,
Excellent is not a word for this poem for it is beyond that. But I am only a poor man with few words. Sy

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18 posted 2002-03-11 08:30 AM


"He couldn't give her the ocean,
so instead he gave her the sky."




WOW!!! Oh my gosh, this one made me cry, it is sooooooooo beautiful, your words and visions always bring a smile to my face and has the ocean rising with inspiration and the sky swimming with light! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is awesome! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Janet, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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19 posted 2002-03-11 08:42 AM


This is so beauitful. I love the sunset/sunrise. Thank you for sharing it.
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20 posted 2002-03-11 08:47 AM


....MAGICAL !!....

Love this Janet Marie!  
Please may we have more?
~Smiles and Hugs, Nancy~

~Sometimes all you really wish for...
     is someone to wish for you.~

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21 posted 2002-03-11 09:50 AM


Janet Marie

The exquisite deapth of love gleaming in your words is far better then any sky...for I think he gifted you with more then sky, he set your heart on fire.  Now that is a beautiful thing!

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22 posted 2002-03-11 10:04 AM


He couldn't give her the ocean,
so instead he gave her the sky.

When we love someone, we want to give them everything their heart has ever wished for... because fulfilling their dreams is glimpsing heaven ourselves. *S* But that's not always possible.

He couldn't give the ocean... but what he gave isn't something she can only visit now and then... it's a gift to sustain her. The sky is with her every day... every night... as limitless as their love. It wraps her in warmth and amazes her with its beauty... a constant reminder that though he left, his love remains with her.

Beautiful work, JM. *S*

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23 posted 2002-03-11 11:39 AM


Wow! This poem is beautiful and your photos make it even more beautiful.
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24 posted 2002-03-11 12:04 PM


Ohhhhhhhhhh JanetMarie, this is goregous my goodness what a sweet write!
Another treasure4me2read in the many days ahead...
Hugs2uAlwaysDearPoetFriend
*~coco~*

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25 posted 2002-03-11 01:10 PM


absolutely beautiful..Janet...nicely done as always...hugss and i love
the paintings too

                     ~Victoria

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26 posted 2002-03-11 04:00 PM


Janet, you deserve every little bit of that sky. I love to read these poems of yours, see the love and the longing in them. Thank you for sharing so much of the two of you with us.

Dee

I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life.     a brand

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27 posted 2002-03-11 04:06 PM


Janet this is  most wonderful. I enjoyed reading it and CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR 120000. post. I saw Kits message on the other thread and you cannot sneak by us. LOL..great work. floria

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But die with all their music in them"
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28 posted 2002-03-11 04:18 PM


Kacy.... Im so glad I could share the warm with you across the miles...thank you for the beautiful reply!!

Duncan .... do you know how good for my muse you are *L* and yes..that line holds the key, doesnt it, ...thank you so much groovy guy, glad you waited up.  LOL

Larry...you humble me...truely....thank you very much poet kind. *S*

Susan ... I just had a feeling you would love this one* wink*...thank you for the sighs and the high praise...Im trying new things and the encouragement means so much. *S*

Melis ... thanks sweetie...and youre right .. He does...and always will...thank you for seeing him in the words. Somehow I knew you would,  *S*

Sharon.... *smiling at you*  and to quote you "Oh, he gave her so much more."
YES... he did. *S* Thank you for that beautiful and perfect pic....I'll see what the muse thinks about your request...you know how moody she is *L* TY so much.

Michael....Then Sky it is...and we will write your name in it *L*  thank you!!

Tara ... thank you girlie...so much for the sweet reply and compliments. *S*

Lyra ... Im so pleased you know that feeling...its wonderful isnt it.. thank you for the lovely response to my work. I like the way you string your words too *S*

SBJ ... YES ... exactly. Thank you for the read.

Kris....thank you girlie...Im liking the free verse too...lets my muse ramble on LOL
TY for your help and insight on this one. (look at the time) ya know...only moths are up that late .. hehe. TY

Kit.... ya got me...busted as I was tiptoeing on by  LOL
thank you for this beautiful reply and for the announcement hug. Youre too good to me but then we've come to expect sweet things from you. *S*'

Donna....yes...somedays the moody muse even surprises me with the peace she finds...thank you dear poetess for this lovely reply!!

Maureen ... that was one of my faves too...thank you for the read and the kind words.

Karilea  I needed it too *S* and thank you for the kind words...Im just trying to show what Ive learned from poets like you and Martie, Reggie, Lauren, (the list goes on.)who do free verse so well......like I said to SEA....I appreciate the encouragement when writing off the usual style and trying new things. TY my daily Sun *S*

Nan ... and your reply is uplifting and postive *L* thank you for being unequivocal you!!

Sy-babes....your gift of words make you rich and I hang on every one *S*
thank you me stinky love for this sweet reply. *kiss*  

Noah...and your replies bring a smile to my face..thank you so much!!  

Smartchick....thank you so much...so glad you enjoyed.

Nancy... just for you...I'll speak to me muse *L*  thank you girlie.

Martie...yes he did...and your replies are like the sky.... a beautiful thing *S* thank you sweets!!


Ruthie....you saw it all between the lines as always *S*...and your reply reads like poetry girlie --if may I quote you.. "it's a gift to sustain her." yes...exactly...thank you so much for this beautiful reply, truely.

srsmith25...thank you for the wow and the reply...so nice of you to stop in. TY *S*

Coco ... you make me smile girlie...thank you for your sweet words dear poetess!! *S*

Victoria ... thank you for the kind words and the hugs...glad you liked the pics...I found that bottom one and knew I had to use it with this one TY

Dee... thank you for allowing my words to touch you, to be able to share him is the reason I write TY so much, girlie  *S*

Floria....LOL...well I tried but you guys are good, I didnt want anyone to notice I live in here LOL  thank you for the congrats and kind words.


THANK YOU ALL for these wonderful replies...you all get one of these  
and Stinky...you get one of these     
my love to poetry land.
jm

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29 posted 2002-03-12 12:38 PM


Janet Marie~

give me the sky any day, in all its glory and ever changing moods...you know I know the depth of this....and each butterfly released when letting go....yes, the muse does whisper to the wind, and she replies....


Greeneyes~

Step through the
barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into the shadows
of my heart

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Janet, this is one of the most tender poems I've ever read. I think it should be submitted to a magazine or something!! Share it with the world...or enter it into a contest, it's a blue ribbon winner for sure. Your muse, when she's being good, is perfection. Promise her Moon Pies and Dr. Pepper if you have to keep her happy!!
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31 posted 2002-03-12 09:42 AM


Lauren ... *smiling at you*  thank you my butterfly sister...for the depth of understanding.

Sharon... LOL @moonpies and Dr Pepper ... hey...its worth a try...she wont fall for the raspberry tea anymore     and thank you for such a wonderful compliment to this poem. Maybe I'll submit to "Aphrodite"


thank you to all,
peace and poetry
jm

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32 posted 2002-03-13 12:15 PM


Absolutely beautiful.  
The last two lines were magnificent

Let thy moon arise.  William Blake

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33 posted 2002-03-13 03:00 PM


  And, I did read it again, and think more should "feel" this warmth too.

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34 posted 2002-03-13 03:03 PM


A beautifully dynamic work.  You don't write often but when you do its a lollapalooza!

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

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35 posted 2002-03-13 05:44 PM


lunatic ... thank you so much for the magnificently beautiful reply I appreciate your generostiy...so good to see you in the blue pages again.

Sharon... youre going to spoil me !! thank you girlie... for the "warm bump"  

Interloper ...   and thank you so much...I dont think anyone has used "dynamic" of my work before...and I've called my moody muse many things...she likes "lollapalooza!"  LOL thanks for stopping in and the kind words.


thank you all for the wonderful replies.
jm

You never knew what I loved in you,
I dont know what you loved in me ...
Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be.

Jackson Browne

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36 posted 2002-03-13 10:44 PM


Just because I needed to.
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37 posted 2002-03-13 11:29 PM


Janet - This is such a beautiful, romantic write.  Nicely done.

Dave

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38 posted 2002-03-14 12:02 PM


Duncan ... come as many times as you need.

Dave ... thank you so much for stoping in and reading.

thanks to all for the kind words,
peace and poetry
jm

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39 posted 2002-03-15 08:37 PM


Jan,

WOWOWOW girl you  know I've been a fan of
your writing forever and a day now...I can't
believe I've not responded to this...please
forgive me for I had read it and could have
sworn I replied..but aparently I am losing
my mind! Nevermind that...this is just
such lovely writing, what does one say to
your work when they've said it all...so
i'll give you what in my mind is the ulitmate
compliment to a poet...you inspire me to
be a better poetress, thank you for your
divine words and wonderful friendship.

love ya much!
your sunshine gal,
amy

"you can't stop
the rain
from pouring down
can't stop the
world from turning 'round
can't stop me from
loving you
no matter
what you do

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40 posted 2002-03-16 12:12 PM


Amy... nothing to forgive girlie
thank you for this sweet encouraging reply...
youre so good for my moody muse
hey..I love your new signature.


thanks to all

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42 posted 2002-03-16 12:59 PM


Sunshine....are you trying to tell my muse something? TY



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43 posted 2002-03-19 10:32 PM


I was on today and decided to see what works you created lately and as usual you didn't disappoint.  

"I wanted to take you to the ocean" he whispered.
"I wanted to be the one to give that to you, to see
your face when you saw it for the first time.
Then, I wanted to see it through your eyes."

I really like that  verse.  It expresses alot of emotions and love.  I really am glad i had the chance to read it.  

There's a peace inside us all
Let it be your friend
It will help you carry on
In the end
There's a peace inside us all
-Creed

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44 posted 2002-03-20 12:21 PM


thank you bae....it is really cool that you would stop in and take the time to find me in back pages...I am honored, and touched by it... truly.
So good to see your name here tonite.
thanks so much

Of all the things in me I could never be,
of the true I kept hidden from view,
the best parts of my heart ...
were the ones touched by you.

jm

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45 posted 2002-07-03 08:34 PM


Okay..this is what I mean. You want to borrow my muse..but I want to borrow your eyes.

It's like you see..through a kaleidoscope of reasoning. This piece especially feels like a photograph..black and white memories with tinges of azure..Even your blue..is bluer.
You have surpassed mosaic thoughts and pieces..You see the whole sky..and make it tangible to the reader. I want that. I hope this makes sense.

When this is read out loud..it really feels like an album of thoughts of a day a person made whole for you.

Sincerely,
Reg

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okay ... so I wasn't here when you posted this and you knew I would come back ONE day to say a little something.  Sometimes a poem doesn't need to be critiqued ... it just needs to be felt and shared, so here ya go!!  Yes, he gave you the sky instead and that is like asking for the moon and getting the galaxy instead for the ocean is encompassed in the sky and the pull of the tide is controlled by the light of night from the heavens.  Now if that doesn't prove his love for you, then someone ain't listening.  Yeah, I know, give me a pickle and I will make "fresh" cucumber sandwich for you, but hey ... that's what I do!!! LIVE WITH IT.  

Now, I found something very interesting in your poem that came about from me searching a "glow-bug's" works for "flacid" .... Look below at your OWN versus to see what I am talking about. ROFL

=======================================

His arms wrapped around her waist as
she leaned back in contentment's rest
*************

Sated by the sun's warm silence,
each knew what the other was thinking
*************
lake's mirrored surface, turning each
*************

GET THE POINT??????  NEED I CONTINUE??:!
ROFLMBO    

Ya know I couldn't pass that up now didn't ya.  BTW ... I could continue in every verse, but I don't think you need them all pointed out to you.  

hugs sweet poetess


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47 posted 2002-07-08 07:34 AM


Mark ...
quote:
Sometimes a poem doesn't need to be critiqued ... it just needs to be felt and shared, so here ya go!!  Yes, he gave you the sky instead and that is like asking for the moon and getting the galaxy instead for the ocean is encompassed in the sky and the pull of the tide is controlled by the light of night from the heavens.  Now if that doesn't prove his love for you, then someone ain't listening.

Even youre replies are poetry my Aquarian wise one ... thank you for those beautiful words of heart and for the insightful view thru your wise eyes. You know a moth needs that when she gets distracted. Thank you for reminding me of whats important.

Now...as for your acrostic word search...
YEAH I GET THE POINT...ya had waaay too much time on your hands yesterday  LOL
Arent you just too clever for a moth and glowbug LOL I think me and Reggie need the pest control     heh

And Hey...ya missed something in the poem  


would Carry him away.
For nOw, they would share the same breath
and try to sloW time.

"I wanted to Be the one to give that to you, to see
your face when yOu saw it for the first time.
Then, I wanted to see it through  Your eyes."

But tiMe would not allow that wish
to be grAnted. For fall was fading.
Still, what had been shaRed, would not
ever allow winter's regret to set in.
He stood and held out his hand,
lifting her up to meet his waiting Kiss.


thank you MC...youre the best

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48 posted 2002-10-10 11:32 PM


Still, what had been shared, would not
ever allow winter's regret to set in.

You've taught me more than you know, Jams.
Thank you.

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49 posted 2002-12-31 03:43 AM


*in awe*
Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
50 posted 2003-08-04 08:08 AM


I probably wasn't around the forums much when you posted this one... but I am glad to have read this today...

He couldn't give her the ocean,
so instead he gave her the sky.

great... simply briliant...

regards
sudhir

gemjop
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since 2002-11-18
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51 posted 2003-08-04 08:43 AM


JM, thanks for leading us here..now, your latest has even more levels than it did to me before. Truly, so so captivating.

much love to ya mothy
gem
xxxx

Instant karma's gonna get you.

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

52 posted 2005-06-15 12:10 PM


One of my favorites, as you know.

And again I quote my friend,

"How do you hold a bird in the palm of your hand?"

nodding

"Become the sky..."


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