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JamesBowie
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since 2000-11-25

Posts 252
big old Bangor Maine up by the shack

0 posted 2002-03-08 11:49 PM

Contemplation requires forward thought
into the realms where fish swim on glass
and daylight shimmers through gossamer strands
of cobwebs left by confused spiders, who only
weave because it has always been so
In the days to follow, he vividly
depicts the shapes forming from the biting frost
of fringe thought, where standards not withstanding,
change occurs with random order in a chaotic clash
with no sense of tranquility
Trembling hands put pen to paper
and scribe the overpowering visions into words
that entail a gravid future
where the rich and powerful shall receive no comfort from their earthly spoils
cast out, as bare as their arrival on this earth
As it is so, then it shall be.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2002-03-09 12:08 PM

"change occurs with random order in a chaotic clash
with no sense of tranquility
Trembling hands put pen to paper"

I love this

doreen peri
Member Elite

since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

2 posted 2002-03-09 01:29 AM

"As it is so, then it shall be."

and it IS!!!!! ..... an awesome write, james....

very well done!!

the images of cobwebs and spiders and the lines

"the shapes forming from the biting frost
of fringe thought"

damn! fringe thought? it's just frigging good poetry ... your images are awesome

ecrivan
Member Elite

since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

3 posted 2002-03-09 07:29 AM

that change knows no tranquility...is a good one James...and that is how life is meant to be..courage

[This message has been edited by ecrivan (03-09-2002 07:30 AM).]

Krissy
Senior Member

since 2002-02-22

Posts 556
kent England

4 posted 2002-03-09 12:09 PM

James this is a very well written and constructed poem, I really like the way this flows smoothly

take the hand of one
lead don’t follow into night
see the light begin

This is really well written, Very well done, much truth in this smiles to your soul