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ethome
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since 2000-05-14
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0 posted 2002-03-08 02:27 AM



Slight rewrite......
                       After the first creeping rays scan the meadows
                       with white lightwaves of morning over greensward
                       gliding like a spirit they conquer silhouettes.
                       Without fading and with reckless inspiration
                       they reach the tempered sands and reveal reflections
                       past the glassworks and at last to images made
                       by breath, heaving in dream zones of light slumber.
                       Inside the walls there stands the dark figures
                       where, collecting their jizz, they conspire mystery,
                       illusions of connected conjure.
                       They stretch now and begin to move, so fast they go
                       in crowds, and at last in a brilliant madness -
                       blazing butterscotch swords dissect them into
                       splaying icons round sunlit kins.
                       And always music, playing out of reach,
                       a rooster crowing, cracksman of sweet sleep
                       sifting through dreamland pastures in the mind
                       and flushing out visions of Eldorado.
                       The cockcrow of choice causing bedfellows and soul singers to
                       battle,
                       for the beauty's heart.
                       At last, a murmer, late for morning work,
                       whispers from the crest of the cortex beyond
                       where finally a small embyro of conscious light
                       feathers the flickering lids of life.
                       Then like a coiled spring set free she bolts straight up to -
                       the boondoggle of a button to push, before a smile breaks
                       honey sweet across her face - my wife awake!
                       _________________


The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up
spaces of consciousness and resistance; to language oppressions; to
re-language historie

[This message has been edited by ethome (03-08-2002 02:30 AM).]

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Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2002-03-08 10:00 AM


they reach the tempered sands and reveal reflections
                       past the glassworks and at last to images made
                       by breath, heaving in dream zones of light slumber.
                       Inside the walls there stands the dark figures
                       where, collecting their jizz, they conspire mystery,
                       illusions of connected conjure.
                       They stretch now and begin to move, so fast they go
                       in crowds, and at last in a brilliant madness -
                       blazing butterscotch swords dissect them into
                       splaying icons round sunlit kins.
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Eric...these are unique and stunning images.
So wonderful to see your name here poet pal...I hope all is well with you...
I miss you around here

So it seems your saving grace was only saving face,
you thought he was wanting you...
but he was only wanting you to let him off the hook.

~BNL~

Marsha
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2 posted 2002-03-08 01:27 PM


PT darling boy Oh WOW when YOU write you really write, this is utterly utterly fabulous. This is so incredibly outstanding I love it love it love it

Too many amazing lines to quote this really is utterly utterly fabulous

Absolutely perfect poetry


I’ve read fabulous pieces from you before this is simply stunning. Truly you’ve outdone yourself darling boy.


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79


Martie
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3 posted 2002-03-08 01:32 PM


Eric

The images in this are outstanding, my friend..and the final lines just made me smile.  So good to see you!

Mistletoe Angel
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4 posted 2002-03-08 09:17 PM




(smiles) Awwwwwwwww, this is soooooooo beautifully romantic, sweet friend, I just love the imagery you use in your words and how you always present such a pleasant suprise in the end with a smile! (big hugggsssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Eric, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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