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Let Me Escape (pantoum)
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Let Me Escape (pantoum) |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989
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Let me escape into your arms hold me through the night, bring forth passions hidden within take me to a new height. Hold me through the night kiss my tears away, take me to a new height make me want to stay. Kiss my tears away as our souls entwine, make me want to stay be forever mine. As our souls entwine hold me through the night, be forever mine take me to a new height. On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Very nice, beautifully written...Seems you do this very well....enjoyed.. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Kiss my tears away as our souls entwine, make me want to stay be forever mine. Beautiful work, Gentle Spirit... very romantic  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Nicely done...I think though that height should be in the plural as in take me to new heights..just a thought  |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Awwwwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, pantoums are so much fun to write! (kiss on cheek) May you forever hold true love close to your heart and escape to all your dreams, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Donna, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Gentle spirit I love the pantoum and you did a great job witht his one. floria Floria |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Donna, I'd like to pantoum that every night! Great job. Hey...I want a picture!  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Gentle Spirit, Wonderful villanelle, enjoyed. |
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Accordionmaid Member
since 2001-10-28
Posts 153MA/USA |
This is beautiful. I am new to the pantoum, have tried one, so far. Yours is very smooth. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
What is a pantoum? How to getum pant'em? LOL. I am so ignorant. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Pat yourself on the back, you've met the challenge well...it's perfectly done and it's beautiful! I may build up the courage to try this soon.This is a keeper~ Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
You've a lovely pantoum format here.. You've modified the standard format, yes? We're doing pantoums in the workshop this month - It's nice to see them here in Open as well..  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
A quick thanks to all for the kind words. Nan, I don't know if this is modified from the other format or not. I will have to check it out, but this is the way that I originally learned how to do them, and everyone at that forum a few years ago did them this way also. Perhaps there is more than one style? Thanks. Donna On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I dpn't know how the style is supposed to go, I have much to learn. Hey, I just mastered(?) sonnets. love this poem, though. Sandra |
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