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Her Song

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Martie
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Her Song

See that girl all blush and thin
See the sky that dangles
At the edge of her whim
Blue dress exploding all around her
Hear the galloping of her youth

Hear her song
Of heart so long the sound
Held in dimming light
Covered with a flannel gown
Hung in the sun to flower

She walks where eyes watch
And melts as she passes each whisper
Her colt legs strong in root take note
Of each cracked sidewalk cloaked
With her impatience

She is falling in love with a love song
That plays her each night in dim
Her skin like angel dust when touched
Leaves a pattern laced with trust

See this woman strong with fragile
She who walks the road less traveled
Dusted off from many falls
The girl still sings within her walls
Her song


© Copyright 2002 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 03-06-2002 12:20 PM       View Profile for Startime   Email Startime   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Startime's Home Page   View IP for Startime

BRAVO!!!!!This poem is absolutely wonderful...Her Song sings a different tune but still is filled with all the feelings that fill her heart...BRAVO!!! I love it...**big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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See this woman strong with fragile
She who walks the road less traveled
Dusted off from many falls
The girl still sings within her walls
Her song
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Ah Martie....you continue to leave me breathless after each post that I read.  Thank you for this one....Her Song....yes!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

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3 posted 03-06-2002 12:28 PM       View Profile for Auguste   Email Auguste   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Auguste's Home Page   View IP for Auguste

I think I'm seeing a lot of pieces of my dear friend, Martie.   And no more falling! LOL!  This is pretty and I enjoyed much. *hugs*

Michael

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.  

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Thank you for writing this just for me....I promise to share it well....

This, my dear, is more than a Keeper...it's a treasurer....
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5 posted 03-06-2002 01:15 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Martie yes this is a treasure, and I printed this one out and will frame this as "your" contribution to my wall of poetry friends.  I think I happen to like this the best of all that you have ever done, as the visions it created were so vivid in my mind (but still like that curtain flapping in the breeze, you know - they way you said it)

~* Without deep reflection one knows from daily life that one exists for other people ." *~

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She is falling in love with a love song
That plays her each night in dim
Her skin like angel dust when touched
Leaves a pattern laced with trust

See this woman strong with fragile
She who walks the road less traveled
Dusted off from many falls
The girl still sings within her walls
Her song

You dear lady are a treasure... and your words..touching truths we can ponder... loved this...
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7 posted 03-06-2002 01:30 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

that is the part I liked too


"
She is falling in love with a love song
That plays her each night in dim
Her skin like angel dust when touched
Leaves a pattern laced with trust

See this woman strong with fragile
She who walks the road less traveled
Dusted off from many falls
The girl still sings within her walls
Her song"


this is fantastic imagery and emotion
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8 posted 03-06-2002 01:47 PM       View Profile for Nightshade   Email Nightshade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nightshade's Home Page   View IP for Nightshade

Love this Martie!! Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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Martie~
Your heart ... your heart ...
in each piece of poetry I hear your heart songs~

This is so touching~
So real ... so you~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Blue dress exploding all around her
Hear the galloping of her youth

See this woman strong with fragile
She who walks the road less traveled
Dusted off from many falls
The girl still sings within her walls
Her song

I would have loved this poem simply for the phrase "See this woman strong with fragile"... but the whole is so amazing. *S* Every time I think I've read your best, you up the ante'. *S* Beautiful!
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Martie, I could see her in that dress, this is wonderful.floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

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12 posted 03-06-2002 04:45 PM       View Profile for Mistletoe Angel   Email Mistletoe Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Mistletoe Angel's Home Page   View IP for Mistletoe Angel

"See this woman strong with fragile
She who walks the road less traveled
Dusted off from many falls
The girl still sings within her walls
Her song"




(BIG HUGGGSSSSSSS) God Bless You, sweet friend, I couldn't help but cry reading your gorgeous emssage of faith and optimism, I only wish the whole world can think and feel this way and forever follow their dreams down the path less travelled and let the songbirds join their heartbeats in melody of love! (kiss on cheek) You are a true angel, sweet friend, we all love you so much, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet artie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton
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See that girl all blush and thin
See the sky that dangles
At the edge of her whim

Blue dress exploding all around her
Hear the galloping of her youth
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only you can come up with these awesome images and phrases...
this is one of the most delightful poems I've read in a long time...sheer poetry just for the sake of poetry.
what an awesome muse you have my girlie
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Martie...I agree with Startime.  BRAVO!!!! This is a rare gem.  Beautiful beyond words, priceless.  ***Ivy Rose
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Martie, this is wonderful, creative, moving writing!
As always, I enjoy your style~

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

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The pinnacle of Martiesque... a pure treasure to read and experience.  
Elizabeth Cor
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A few faves:

"Blue dress exploding all around her"

"Her skin like angel dust when touched
Leaves a pattern laced with trust"

"See this woman strong with fragile...
Dusted off from many falls"

Thank you for the musing this invites. Delightful, warm, playful... kinda spunky, too ... and hope, a bright hope... ~smiles~ I like this one, Martie. ~m
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Love it...fresh, invigorating etc...from one air-poet to another...

K
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Again you have impressed me with yor talents.. again I enjoy the way the story unfolds..to a conclusion we can ponder all in our own way...

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It's good to see a stone in its original setting....helps you appreciate the new, and understand that the value in it isn't based on anything temporal at all.

This that you truly speak of here...I've seen it many times, for many many years...as you know. It's as beautiful now as ever.

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