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JamesBowie
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since 2000-11-25
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big old Bangor Maine up by the shack

0 posted 2002-03-03 11:04 PM


I can still see as a different man
feel with the soft hands of a surgeon
speak to giants with a booming voice
hear as if I wanted to listen

but it should come as no suprise
to you I am limited as a person
changing little from what you chose
fitting into a tightly obscene mold

So when you stand with mouth agape
at the words you hear pouring out
just remember you tried to form the mold
but I chose to cast it aside

have a good life dear


© Copyright 2002 James Bowie - All Rights Reserved
Duncan
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since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455

1 posted 2002-03-04 12:48 PM


Love the dryness of the last line.  Seems some people make choices, then are surprised with the consequences.  Maybe I'm reading into it, based on my own experiences.  Either way, I liked it alot.
ecrivan
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since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923
my own state
2 posted 2002-03-04 01:25 AM


Is this as a statement of how the love you tried to pigeon-hole into being this, that and the other?The form she made out for you wasn't what you had set for yourself. Well so it goes for so many couples that come together and then fall apart..love is mutual and should mean a real acceptance of the molds that we all have.Liked the ending too


JamesBowie
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big old Bangor Maine up by the shack
3 posted 2002-03-04 01:28 PM


thanks and yeah it was of a relationship before I met my wife-she was a girl that never grew up and could not see she could not change me
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