Response Poem to e.e. cummings's "Poem, or Beauty Hurts Mr. Vinal" ...for class

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Response Poem to e.e. cummings's "Poem, or Beauty Hurts Mr. Vinal" ...for class

wayoutwalt
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)

0 posted 2002-03-03 08:21 PM

Scroll down to the bottom of this link for a poorly punctuated and spaced copy of the original, the only one I could find
stole it from you mister
preach it
my country, still the

same, land of Inter
Net Banner and Double Your
Fun With A Million Things (to do
land of a Never Close
and Ted
Turner) of you i
whine:land of Affirmative Action and Drug Company Law Suit,
land about FBI Warning-
from every DVD

let freedom ring

all men. i must say pro-abortion, amongst the un
-beleaguered and otherwise stinking .... which
i can say (On TV) as its been okayed to do
that and this off beat lou read. i would

copyright trademark patent
rhymes, like Gillette Mach 3
shaving with the grain
since 1922! what a year of
Honing Of The Poetics (Case in point

i believe you, “Poem, or Beauty Hurts Mr. Vinal”
miserable prophet amidst the coffins
these vulture bio-violinists neroing down among my and your
twin towers-Rossana Podesta and Elizabeth Taylor were Just Too Good For Their Parts,
The lock upon my garden gate's a snail, that's what it is.
First there is a mountain, then there is no mountain, then there is.
In his whatthe....???

i don’t get it!) well that’s ok too
all those homegrown
mockingbirds Art is a Whore of Life!
a formula one:example, Race Your Car Into
A Wall and If It Isn’t A Martyr It Isn’t A
Hero therefore my cast of Friends let
us now sing each and all half-acidly A-
mer
i

ca, how
are
You. Don’t you know
i’m your native son,like
all of you goody-got-the goods
delicate situation (Bobbit)
insert male tab into female slot--ugly
Paxilpushing-
disenchanted-bluepillbleeding-Get Back I’m A Scientist
americans (who ten-to-one and with
upward remodeled eyes,it still hurts
but i’m still here,convulsing,now upon
another episode of Days of our lives
--how smugly
let out a tiny premeditative excuse me:What stinks?

ozone.
anything less would be uncivilized

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

1 posted 2002-03-03 09:47 PM

Far reaching and wayout of my league!
Hope you make the grade with this one!
check mark!
I'll bet your teacher just loves you!!

Poet deVine

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

2 posted 2002-03-03 11:04 PM

Pretty 'wayout' Walt!

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

3 posted 2002-03-04 02:20 PM

well done!!!

being the cummings nut that I am. . . this is a great response to the original. . . it's the right style, the right tone, and the right flow. . . one that's updated for our times now. . . but, perhaps it's not the time that's changed. . . only the names. . .

great job walt. . .

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wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)

4 posted 2002-03-04 05:13 PM

thanks all and thanks Sven for being able to apreciate what the heck I am talkin bout

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