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nakdthoughts
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0 posted 2002-03-03 07:28 AM



Verbal Tears

Surrendering to the softness of memories,
old conversations between he and I,
iced the bruising that remains
from the graffiti-like spraying
received undeservedly, those final moments.

Like my Father's death, there will be
another grieving, my forgiveness
in its wake, though receiving none in return.
No stone to revisit, no coldness
to be warmed by my touch.

No reality remains, except for
the walling of my existence
by falsehoods, when a heart,
neither jealous nor envious,
but in need of attention,
received instead, intolerance.

Words, replace the "verbal tears",
the coldness last felt by a heart,
in its now, silent world.


*thank you jwesley for the "verbal tears"



"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

[This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (03-03-2002 07:29 AM).]

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Victoria
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1 posted 2002-03-03 08:49 AM


always nice to be inspired by one..enjoyed M...hugss

             ~Vic

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2 posted 2002-03-03 08:56 AM


This was a heart felt piece, Full of emotion,
much enjoyed.
Huggzzz, Lia    

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3 posted 2002-03-03 10:41 AM


M.  a ton of feelings lies herein...You write
them so well....

VAS
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4 posted 2002-03-03 10:50 AM


Too wonderfully penned.

One thing that really impressed me was the fact that the word "tears" could be pronounced both ways and be powerful in both. Glad jwesley inspired you. This is a super piece!

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

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5 posted 2002-03-03 11:43 AM


Oh, this is so sad, wouldn't it be nice if there was not so much pain in the world?
Sandra

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6 posted 2002-03-03 11:47 AM


iced the bruising that remains
from the graffiti-like spraying

You've such a wonderful way with your words,
and this is no exception.

Very nice work Maureen~

nakdthoughts
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7 posted 2002-03-03 03:03 PM


Victoria..yes  sometimes a response or a word or a title touches me and inspires me to write even when I don't wish to.*s

Lia..I am a hypersensitive indivual, highly emotional but it evens out, when I am happy I am super delightful  *w thank you
((hugs))
M    


Barry..I am a bundle of feelings, ribbon wrapped, waiting for the happy feelings to be released.


VAS...(hugs) and thanks *s I often see a word or phrase that fits my mood that moment and is perfect for completing my poem. And Inever thought of tears both ways..hmmm


Sandra...some say we make our own pain that no one else can do it  to us..I  am not sure whether it is true or not.
Thinking of you moon sister ((hugs))
M

BluesSerenade, sometimes I don't know where the words come from..thank you
*s
Maureen


"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

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8 posted 2002-03-03 04:28 PM


Maureen - Truly a very sad and emotive write.  I don't know how you have trouble interpreting poems when you can write like this.

Dave

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9 posted 2002-03-03 06:11 PM


I could really FEEL that one, Maureen.

Words, replace the "verbal tears",
the coldness last felt by a heart,
in its now, silent world.

How very beautiful

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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10 posted 2002-03-03 09:03 PM




(BIG HUGGGSSSSSSSS) Oh Maureen, this is so very sad and beautifully touching, sweet friend, I too wish there wouldn't be as much tears in the world and we can all find joy and harmony between each other! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much, this is sooooo beautiful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Maureen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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11 posted 2002-03-03 09:55 PM


The pleasure gained from reading your usage of verbal tears is all mine, my friend...

jwesley


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12 posted 2002-03-03 10:29 PM


Oh this was good. So very well described.

Nan

nakdthoughts
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13 posted 2002-03-04 07:04 AM


Dave, sometimes I will write sad and in the  next moment my mood will change, that's the drawback of being a Moonchild (cancer). I thank you for the comment about my writing..but my understanding is limited sometimes by my experiences in life and they really have been not as worldly as many on here probably have had. So I can only base my understanding on that for now until my own world opens a bit more. *I am working on that. Thanks again.

Lyra, the verbal tears was a phrase expressed by jwesley in a response to his poem of fallen angels. It touched me in a different manner but I wanted to use it in my poem of misunderstanding. I hope he enjoyed it's usage.

hugs
M * I still would like to do a poem with you someday...*s


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14 posted 2002-03-04 10:55 AM


Beautiful....


Lauren~

Greeneyes~

Step through the
barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into the shadows
of my heart

nakdthoughts
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15 posted 2002-03-04 03:46 PM


  
Tears cleanse the view of the world Noah.
They are not such a bad thing
*s
M


jwesley..it was my pleasure to write with your phrasing. *s
Always
M


Nan, thank you for reading*s
hugs
M  


Lauren, thank you I appreciate your visit. *s

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