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Under a Brighter Moon |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
kissed by a warmer breeze, perhaps our love would bloom. But alas, we've none of these. We're prisoners of time, shackled to the past. I've lost the words that rhyme. Too late, too far, too fast. Nan |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
wow..all I can say *s I am enjoying the poems on this day..this one hit me just right. Thanks M "Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less." |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big hugggssssss) This is a beautifully bittersweet poem, sweet friend, we may all be prisoners of time but as long as we believe in ourselves and hold our dreams close, we can always feel as though we are free and with love, we can all soar in joy and hope for many brighter tomorrows! (kiss on cheek) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Nancy, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Love is indeed 'all in the timing'... Nicely done, Pilgrimage...  |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Nan darling girl this is simply outstanding writing, you have done so well here I don’t know how you do it. Again flawless and perfectly presented. What can I say but this is exceptional. YOU always write brilliantly and today is no exception. Wonderful flow and rhythm the rhyme is fabulous too these words are utterly utterly awesome   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I think we all relate to this very well.... Short but with a lot of meaning... |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Nan I like the poem but I disagree, we are not prisoners of time we are prisoners of our own devices. Still - it has impact what you said. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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janmew Member
since 2001-10-27
Posts 134Canada |
Short but beautiful! I love poetry that can capture me in even a few words. Very nicely done! Jan |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Dear nakdthoughts, I'm glad you liked it. I've read just a few today, and you're right. They're all good. It must be a special day(though I have to add that most of the ones I read here are good on any day) Dear Noah, How kind you are. Thank you. Dear Nan, Thank you. I started it as another poem, but this was better. Dear Marsha, You always say such nice things. I know love poems are your forte, but I'm much better acquainted with the end of love and the stuttering starts than the heady middles. Dear Magnus, I promised the next one would be shorter. Didn't want people to see my name in the list and think they have to wait til they have a half hour free to read it. Dear Kethry, You have a point. We frequently forge our own chains, lock them tight, and forget where we put the key. I'm trying hard to break that habit. Dear James, Thank you. Dear Jan, I like the short ones best. Nan |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Its short, but it says it all, Nan...beautifully! copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Nan - Great writing. I really liked the first two lines too. Something very unique and original about them. By the way, I myself wear those shackles of the past, but I've almost filed completely through the chain.lol Dave |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Nan hi there mum is right this is an absolutely excellent poem. I know this shackles, but they are easy to break when you realise that you have your own key. You really are an excellent writer, I was advised to keep my eyes peeled for your work, and even if I had to search for it to make the effort. I’m glad I did, this is very good writing. Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
I've also made my own chains-I'm afraid to break them but at the same time don't want to take that chance. Very nicely written.  sky |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Oh pilgrimage, I just love how you did this. so good. floria Floria |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
What might have been,so well said, with just enough longing. Great write. Sandra |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Dear Lyra, Now that I've said it all, do I have to keep quiet? I warn you, I might bust if I try to hold it in. Dear Dave, I thought of the first two lines, and had to write a poem around them. It was going to be longer, but I like short ones best. Dear Krissy, I'd put neon signs and sirens on the poems so you could find them easier, but your mom's cribsheet didn't say anything about sirens and neon signs.(And I just barely worked up to using the 'center' command-she does it all) Dear Sky, I'll lend you a file. Dear Vandana, Thank you so much for taking the time to let me know you read it and liked it. Dear Floria, Thanks Dear Sandra, I didn't want to overdo, thanks for saying it was just enough. Nan |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Sometimes the hint of brevity reveals more well done... |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Thank you, decaflame, I appreciate it. Nan |
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