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Upon Ending

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SpitFire
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0 posted 03-02-2002 07:42 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for SpitFire

Stone smooth and exiting,
though ragged scraps of longing slide,
across the floor in fits and lines.
Seems only the walls and doorway smooth out
in strength and knowing. This time.

A corner of silence attempting, so,
skipping through the liquid of inside delights,
Somehow, despite the fear tainting.
I'll continue to dance, wasted on a mean tug of seeing.

And although I remember yesterday
like the crust of a severed vein, weeks old -
dry - suffocating almost, but healing,
Saturday will still have enough heat to surround a wonder,
and a heart half flickered and light.

And so there is patience in waiting,
for answers to stain, I know,
seal strength in satin and dry,...
top coat and gleaming, yes.





[This message has been edited by SpitFire (03-02-2002 08:17 PM).]

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1 posted 03-02-2002 07:46 PM       View Profile for Mistletoe Angel   Email Mistletoe Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Mistletoe Angel's Home Page   View IP for Mistletoe Angel



(sigh) Wow, I can feel a strong yearning in these words but also much hope, sweet friend, there is indeed patience in waiting and I am delighted you feel rest and comfort now, and I know in the end you will be as happy as you can ever dream of! (smiles) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is wonderful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton
ecrivan
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my own state


2 posted 03-02-2002 07:55 PM       View Profile for ecrivan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ecrivan's Home Page   View IP for ecrivan

like the choice of words and the images from them, keep up the writing
Janet Marie
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3 posted 03-02-2002 08:11 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Seems only the walls and doorway smooth out
in strength and knowing. This time.

A corner of silence attempting,
==========================
Somehow. Despite the fear tainting,
==============================
wasted on a mean tug of seeing.

And although I remember yesterday
like the crust of a severed vein, weeks old -
dry - suffocating almost, but healing,
Saturday will still have enough heat to surround a wonder,
and a heart half flickered and light.


And so there is patience in waiting,
for answers to stain,
===================================

Such a deeply personal write...so layered and complex...or more so intricate.
The imagery alone has more depth than one or two reads could ever reveal. You have this amazing gift for writing the emotions dressed up in abstract confessions ...that draws the reader in and holds them to your every word in fascination.
Good to see your name here A-girlie.
heart-hugs
mothy me

Dont walk before me, lord knows I cant follow
dont walk behind me, I dont think that I can lead
dont walk around me cause you know how dizzy I get.

jwesley
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4 posted 03-02-2002 08:31 PM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

What a way to end my day...reading words of yours...and though someone put grafittie (or what ever!) on your picture, I still see you standing there.

Now I go to ponder what you've said...


jwesley
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The Shores of Alone


5 posted 03-02-2002 08:43 PM       View Profile for catalinamoon   Email catalinamoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit catalinamoon's Home Page   View IP for catalinamoon

Yeah, what happened to your picture?? This is one strong poem, Alicia.
Complex, a lttle out of my understanding at the moment,maybe you can explain it to me sometime.
Sandra
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SpitFire

Such a search the heart makes, then ends with the turning upward into peace, or at least hope.  I love the way you write!
Dark Angel
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7 posted 03-03-2002 01:46 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

And although I remember yesterday
like the crust of a severed vein, weeks old -
dry - suffocating almost, but healing,,,


Oh Dear Alicia, how I can relate to these lines you've so perfectly penned. "Almost suffocating" yes! "but healing" indeed, Indeed!

God, you take my breath away!  

This is going into my library.

Maree

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8 posted 03-03-2002 01:47 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

ooops,
doing the library thing this time definitely.
Kethry
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9 posted 03-03-2002 02:36 AM       View Profile for Kethry   Email Kethry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kethry

Spitfire, amazing images the one that got me besides the vein thingy was the coat of paint which seals and makes everything shiny. Fantabulous.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown


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10 posted 03-03-2002 03:07 AM       View Profile for BluesSerenade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BluesSerenade

You've got such depth and talent.
It's quite the combination!

And I always enjoy reading you~

SpitFire
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11 posted 03-03-2002 11:24 AM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~ ,...Thank you more than words can relay, for reading, time, and thought. *Peace sweet poets.

(the photo's just gone, for now, perhaps I'll find a new one soon, and I agree though, that what's there now does look like some kind of graffiti, ugh).  
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12 posted 03-03-2002 12:37 PM       View Profile for Temptress   Email Temptress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Temptress

Its always a treat for my mind to read a poem from you. I enjoyed this. So many good lines that I'd have to copy/paste almost the entire poem to detail them all. Powerful as usual.

For all who watch.Dare you say hello? Come in and ask the questions that are on your mind, but spare me your judgement until you truly sipped of me.

Lone Wolf
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13 posted 03-03-2002 04:32 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Deep and powerful as always, my friend.  Nice to see you here.  Take care.  

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

EagleOne
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14 posted 03-12-2002 08:08 AM       View Profile for EagleOne   Email EagleOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EagleOne

Wow, certainly worth another read!

We are all just prisoners here of our own device ~ Hotel California, The Eagles

Janet Marie
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15 posted 08-04-2004 08:01 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

And although I remember yesterday
like the crust of a severed vein, weeks old -
dry - suffocating almost, but healing,
Saturday will still have enough heat to surround a wonder,
and a heart half flickered and light.

And so there is patience in waiting,
for answers to stain,

===================================

imagery, metaphor, symbolism...

brilliance... your writing.
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