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Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

0 posted 2002-02-28 09:41 PM

Redwood Road

For five years,
this was the way
home -
down the lee side of a mountain,
a narrow zigzag of a road
winding
between overgrown redwoods
and rock slides.

The reward lies
at the bottom,
through an umbrella of pines
edging a springtime creek,
around a blind curve:

the moon ascending
above silhouetted branches,
reflected below by a small reservoir.

Sometimes,
the moon is full.

© 2002 Corinne Bailey

[This message has been edited by Corinne (03-01-2002 02:02 PM).]

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2002-02-28 09:48 PM

(smiles) Yep, sometimes the moon is full just like last nights phenomenon! (kiss on cheek) This is wonderful, sweet friend, I love the redwood forests so much and dream of going back to Lake Tahoe to see them! We all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Corinne, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Hopefloats
Junior Member

since 2001-10-30

Posts 26
NH

2 posted 2002-02-28 09:52 PM

I could just picture everything spoken here....I really enjoyed the images. Very nicely done.....

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

3 posted 2002-02-28 09:53 PM

Thank you kindly, Noah! Ahh! I live not to far from Lake Tahoe!

Corinne

GenXer
Senior Member

since 2001-12-15

Posts 583
USA

4 posted 2002-02-28 11:56 PM

Definitely sounds like it is a sight to behold. Really nice.

Dave

strbbux
Member Elite

since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

5 posted 2002-03-01 10:56 AM

I want to be there right now, after reading this. Lovely thoughts, floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

6 posted 2002-03-01 11:01 AM

The images were vivid. This was beautiful...

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

7 posted 2002-03-01 11:06 AM

Good. You might try a comma instead of a period after "slides", then change the "T" in "The" to lower case; "lies" to lying; "is" to was in the last line. Nicely done.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

8 posted 2002-03-01 11:24 AM

Corinne~
My goodness - this is just so beautiful~
Replete with imagery from the cave of nostalgic memories~
Love the gentle flow~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

9 posted 2002-03-01 02:04 PM

Thanks, GenX, Strbbux, Gentle Spirit, Bob and Marge!

Bob, thanks for the suggestions, I'll mull them over!

Cor

texasrose
Member

since 2001-10-24

Posts 146

10 posted 2002-03-01 07:11 PM

Wonderful construction and lovely images Corinne. Thank you for sharing.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

11 posted 2002-03-01 08:54 PM

your poetry is always so alive...love this

Lia Fail
Member

since 2002-02-26

Posts 80

12 posted 2002-03-01 10:04 PM

nice imagery I really enjoyed it.
Lia

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