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The Violin is Crying

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Martie
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The Violin is Crying

The violin is crying
its grace caught within the curve
taut to almost fragile
it takes me to the ground
wrapped with icy winds
then to drown

It hurts it hurts to sing this way
the sound so sharp it points
a trill into the rhythm of today
with purpose movement away

Stay this thrill that takes me skyward
for too soon gone is time
and touch can only happen
if you let it play the satin
let it rip your hair around
until you face the grace

Listen
the violin is crying
not me
© Copyright 2002 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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With poetry like this...it certainly is not
crying for you Martie....Nice.
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It hurts it hurts to sing this way
the sound so sharp it points
a trill into the rhythm of today
with purpose movement away

Stay this thrill that takes me skyward
for too soon gone is time
and touch can only happen
if you let it play the satin

let it rip your hair around
until you face the grace
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I have always thought the violin sounded like it was crying...but I could have never put it into words like this.
I hear it playing in my head.
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(big hugggsssssss) Wow, I love the wonderful imagery and emotion in this one, sweet friend, your words and language always speak with music and melody! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is wonderful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton
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Stay this thrill that takes me skyward
for too soon gone is time
and touch can only happen
if you let it play the satin
let it rip your hair around
until you face the grace

Listen
the violin is crying
not me
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Beautiful Martie!  Enjoyed this one so very much this afternoon.
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

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IWIHWT...you did it Martie!  You wrote the violin so very well...

Ok, so here I sit, literally blown away...you've taken ALL my words, Martie...

Oh..yes...keeper...a definite, definitive keeper...
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The violin is crying
its grace caught within the curve
taut to almost fragile
it takes me to the ground
wrapped with icy winds
then to drown

It hurts it hurts to sing this way
the sound so sharp it points
a trill into the rhythm of today
with purpose movement away
Lord!.... If I could write as you do, I might give up my day job... excellent!!!!

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Martie...only one thing to say...I just loved this!!

jwesley
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Martie, when you write, you don't fiddle around! This is awesome, m'lady
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Wonderful write once again Martie. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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OhMartie~
I've already sent this one to my son ...
he will understand this so well~

You made this mother's nostalgia come bouncing through the screen~
I could have sworn I 'heard' it crying ... I reached to turn up the speakers ... and realized quickly what I'd done~

Now if THAT isn't effective writing ..
I don't know what is~

Beautiful lady~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

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Martie I adore violin music, and you have done the violin such justice in this write.  How on earth do you take the same words I know, twist them to shreds, and come up with the most beautiful poetry ever to grace my mind and eyes?  This I have yet to figure out.  I agree with the Captain, if I could write like this I would be in bookstores, and this would be my passion.  Can you tell I loved this one, and it is the keeper of the year for me so far!

~* Imagination is more important than knowledge *~

Einstein

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Dear Martie, I enjoyed the poem, to me it cries in the voice of beauty, brought out a little of something in me.

Sincerely Rick
The violin lay within its place till beaconed by the child
But with each stroke the bow did make, the violin only cried
For there was not the pleasured sound that it was taught to know
The melody was missing and the tempo had no flow

The child had heard the violin sing when mother came to play
But somehow all its happiness, had left and gone away
So there she cried, untaught and sad, but needing friend to sing
To learn the art of music, now just meant everything

Mother can you play it ? For me it only cries
So mother took her friend of years and wiped her daughters eyes
She played a tune so lovely, that a joy came to her heart
The married tunes of loveliness from violin came to part

The cries had turned to music, to the harmony of strings
The hand of taught through gift had shown the music that it brings
And all around could hear the sound, and knew, A Violin
Sirens cry from on their rocks, but violins seem to sing
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This is magic Martie. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

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The good news is, the violin (my favorite) is capable of all ranges of emotions, so here's to the changing tune. Enjoyed
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violin crying
guitar softly weeps
bagpipes moan the widow waiting song

images come from your words
and blend with outhers
that are mostly forgotten sometimes

well done ms martie
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Martie-
This is absolutely beautiful, and penned
in the way that only YOU can.
I love it, my friend.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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Something....to remember!
 
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