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Larry C
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0 posted 2002-02-28 09:57 AM



Outlasting Time
By Larry Chadwick



If time could be accumulated,
In a jar upon the shelf.
I’d collect a pantry full,
And save it for myself.

I’d store it with the love,
I have saved up just for you.
In the hopes the time we’ve lost,
Could be spent as if anew.

It’s a shame we cannot conquer,
All the things that do distract.
It squanders time I’d like to save,
To keep our love intact.

While time, it marches on,
In a jar it will not store.
Still my love is firmly kept,
For the one I yet adore.

February 27, 2002



© Copyright 2002 Larry Chadwick - All Rights Reserved
Professor Gloom
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1 posted 2002-02-28 10:04 AM


Reminds me of “Time in a Bottle”
One of my favorite songs of the past.
Thanks for the reviving the memory

Gloom

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2 posted 2002-02-28 11:09 AM


Larry~ This is such a tender write from you.
Not only the sentiment but the love you've poured into every word.

Love conquers all if it is meant to be.

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3 posted 2002-02-28 11:12 AM




(smiles) This is sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, may the love you share with your sweetheart be timeless and fill your heart with joy forever and ever! (big hugggssssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is beautiful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Larry, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Ariana
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4 posted 2002-02-28 11:14 AM


Larry
Keep that jar tightly sealed and keep the love in your heart.  Your words are so tender and true.

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5 posted 2002-02-28 11:15 AM


Larry C,
Cute write, enjoyed the read.

Marsha
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6 posted 2002-02-28 11:34 AM


Larry darling boy Oh I like this I like it a whole lot. It’s written with such delight and joy. Yes darling boy use every second that you can to love it is all precious

Truly outstandingly fabulous writing here.


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79


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7 posted 2002-02-28 12:47 PM


This one is quite lovely. It's a pity time can't be put away for later. Later comes, and the time is gone. Sigh.

Nan

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8 posted 2002-02-28 01:37 PM


You did this one so very well, Larry...and I agree with gloom...it reminds me of Jim Croce's "Time In A Bottle" from the seventies....I had almost forgotten about that song and it used to be one of my favorites.

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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9 posted 2002-02-28 01:40 PM


your rhymes are always wisdom filled and full of sincerety...tis your signature style I believe.
well done Poet sir

"Never made it as a wise man
couldn't cut it as a poor man stealin
Tired of livin like a blind man
sick of sight without a sense of feelin"

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10 posted 2002-02-28 03:21 PM


Since time is my only constant I do believe

I love your poem *s

M

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11 posted 2002-02-28 03:50 PM


Very beautiful words Larry C.  Nice.....
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12 posted 2002-02-28 06:12 PM


awww the if's and only's of time.....nice read Larry~ makes me want to bottle time for later in life..'if only'..*sigh*  


Lauren~


Greeneyes~

Step through the
barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into the shadows
of my heart

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (02-28-2002 06:45 PM).]

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13 posted 2002-02-28 06:44 PM


Larry, this is so nice, I love poems about time. It just seems to fly by, too fast for me. floria

Floria

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But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Larry C
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14 posted 2002-02-28 07:46 PM


PG,
I'm wishing I had that in my head...but guess I'll just have to wait to hear it again. But seems like a huge compliment to me. Thanks.

Lori,
Thank you so much. Still hoping you had a great trip.

Noah,
Thank you for being so faithful.

Ariana,
Great advice and I'll do my best. Thank you.

Sy,
Thanks for the read.

Mushy,
So true...so true. I'm always glad you read my stuff! Thanks.

Nan,
Who do we see about that? LOL I hate it when that happens. Thanks.

Lyra,
That explains it...I had no life in the seventies missed the music and the TV programs. Thanks.

JM,
See...now people who are as talented as you making compliments like that to me, wow! Thank you so very much.

Maureen,
I always enjoy seeing you here. I'm glad you have the time. *s*

Magnus,
Thank you sir.

Lauren,
That ain't all I'd like to bottle. But that's probably another poem. *S*

floria,
For us all... Thanks.

amusemi
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15 posted 2002-02-28 08:37 PM


The concept behind this is so very charming...but, personally, I wouldn't want any more time...this world has some pretty mean people in it!!!  Just kidding...I only want my allottment!!


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16 posted 2002-02-28 08:51 PM


I just love this!!! Oh if we could only bottle and save the things so dear to us!!  I enjoyed this immensely...hope to read more....Lovely thoughts!!!
Larry C
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17 posted 2002-02-28 10:46 PM


amusemi,
Well...of course you are right! However, I was thinking more of saving the time to be wtih the good people. LOL Thanks.

Hopefloats,
Hey...Welcome to Passions. Hope you like it here! I sure do. And you'll be getting a surprise from Sunshine. Let me know if you don't. LOL Thanks and I look forward to reading your poetry as well.

GenXer
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18 posted 2002-02-28 11:00 PM


Larry - This is really good.  Did you know I have outlasted time?  I am 204 years old.lol

Dave

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19 posted 2002-02-28 11:05 PM


What timeless thoughts here Larry..if Dave is 204 that's young!King Arthur should be 1,000 more...timeless

[This message has been edited by ecrivan (02-28-2002 11:06 PM).]

Larry C
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20 posted 2002-02-28 11:15 PM


Dave,
So you were the old guy that drug himself into the ice cream parlor and ordered an hot fudge sundae. Cashier asked "Crushed nuts?" and you said "No arthritis"! LOL Hey and thanks for the fun.

ecrivan,
So was that Dave in the parlor or King Arthur? LOL Thanks dude.

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