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GenXer
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0 posted 2002-02-27 09:48 PM




The distance keeps growing,
and it will not stop snowing
on footprints of long ago,
of what I used to know

Of the days that lie ahead
there is nothing but dread,
for with each passing day
a little more slips away

My eyes only gaze within
to see what might have been
They’re not in the here and now
They just yearn to get back somehow

My hands are in severe pain,
but clinching them is in vain
For it is sadly for naught,
senseless, to live in a thought

But a dreamer may dream,
though, it is as it seems
That the snow will keep falling
and some day, I’ll stop recalling




© David 2002

[This message has been edited by GenXer (02-27-2002 09:49 PM).]

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1 posted 2002-02-27 09:53 PM


"But a dreamer may dream,
though, it is as it seems
That the snow will keep falling
and some day, I’ll stop recalling"


I know this....
excellent write

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2 posted 2002-02-27 09:54 PM



I hope your days of recall are with us for a long, long time...

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3 posted 2002-02-27 09:56 PM


well expressed!
Senseless to live in the past,time marches on for all of us but thoughts and recollections are precious, I hate to forget...before you know all of what we do will be rewritten, and I hate to think of the variations from the what really was  
continue the recall for a long long time as Karilea mentions!




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4 posted 2002-02-27 10:13 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh David, this is so sad but powerfully expressive, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you and I pray you will forever dream the most sweetest dreams! (big hugggsssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is wonderful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet David, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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5 posted 2002-02-27 10:27 PM


for with each passing day
a little more slips away

*gulp*  
Your poetic words speak volumes to me.
This was an awfully nice write Dave~

GenXer
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6 posted 2002-02-27 11:26 PM


Thanks all for reading, but all of your comments are in the past now and I can't hold onto them any longer.lol  I must move on.

Dave  

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7 posted 2002-02-28 10:54 AM


liked it
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8 posted 2002-02-28 11:19 AM


Dave darling boy oh this is sooooooo good. Truly outstanding, as always, you are such a fine poet. I love the way you’ve written this, it’s utterly beautiful, and your rhyme is divine all the way through

And I know this is all behind you darling boy Now weren’t we supposed to be counting in threes? Jacket, shirt, tie, …….. You really are an excellent poet darling boy, and as for Krissy, well I promise I keep her under restraint, okay try to keep her under restraint

Wonderful writing utterly wonderful


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy


To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79


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9 posted 2002-02-28 11:29 AM


David

I love your words - been there and done that!  You have said what many of us have been thinking.

"But a dreamer may dream,
though, it is as it seems
That the snow will keep falling
and some day, I’ll stop recalling"

Startime
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10 posted 2002-02-28 11:36 AM


*sigh* this poem touched my heart....it is the future that your dreams can become real not a past that is already sealed....**big big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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11 posted 2002-02-28 12:45 PM


This is an elegant poem. True and well-spoken. Very nice.

Nan

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12 posted 2002-02-28 01:48 PM


Of the days that lie ahead
there is nothing but dread,
for with each passing day
a little more slips away

This gives me the chills, Dave....I know that feeling too well!
I'm glad to see you back here again and hope that everything is well with you.

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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13 posted 2002-02-28 06:57 PM


David, I have been there, and as days pass on it seems sometimes to get better and better. Great expression, I am so glad I stopped by. floria

Floria

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But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

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14 posted 2002-02-28 07:11 PM


Dave Hi there I’m here now so you can say bye bye to mum, you want the younger one surely? You know I’m only joking don’t you? So when do you take her off my hands then? Shall I send her over now?

This poem is wonderful, it shows heartache clearly but also hope, I like the spirit of hope here. Well written Dave very well written


Love and warm stuff
As always
Krissy


And while thy willing soul transpiers
at every pore with instant fires
Andrew Marvell 1621-1678

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15 posted 2002-03-09 02:31 PM


very nice..... well done
Connie

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16 posted 2002-03-09 02:36 PM


Dave,  this is a poem which contains many
feelings,  all real...some too real...but
such is life for us all.  You have expressed
this well...Look ahead,  and don't look back
unless only to grow from it...

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17 posted 2002-03-09 05:30 PM



That run through dreams as though real, losing our breath, waking with a gasp, falling through the twilight, holding on to ... what...

I felt the clinch in your fist....

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18 posted 2002-03-09 11:53 PM


David,
I relate to this so much lately....
this is a fantastic write

"My eyes only gaze within
to see what might have been
They’re not in the here and now
They just yearn to get back somehow"

this part, I know.

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