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It Wasn't a Game
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It Wasn't a Game |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
This song of old An ancient snare Were the days of mental decay In fact not a game An escape to a place I longed to be A place I was me In history You may believe What you believe of me But if you have a soul You would look beyond the screams Beyond the yells Behond the fantasy And see a plea For help Of hopelessness Of alone I have no shame I have no game It was taken long ago By people Who could never see I am a human being Who knows Who sees The lies fed to me So you point at me And laugh degrees But heaven simply knows When the end decrees Your part in the failing Of me I only wish to live again To write what I see To find a place to be So bury this deed Curb your need For there is nothing left to bleed I folded long ago So crucify Take voodoo pins Wreak blizzards and rains Flood me with seas There's nothing left to take from me I only needed honesty Just one person to reach When I was in need... Even someone who used to know me I learned my lesson I can no longer feel You won |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
amusemi - the other never wins, they only think they do. A sad write. Your wish will come true, write what you feel, and you will find that place to be. Peace my friend.. BC |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
For there is nothing left to bleed I folded long ago So crucify Take voodoo pins Wreak blizzards and rains Flood me with seas There's nothing left to take from me I only needed honesty Just one person to reach When I was in need... Even someone who used to know me I learned my lesson I can no longer feel =================================== this is deep and layered...much to see here in both the imagery and intend. Quite a poetic purge...and I will state the obvious...though I get the poems intent... it proves otherwise...you "feel" it and express it well. "they" didnt take that from you. well done amusemi ... the release is part of the reclaiming. take care, jm "Never made it as a wise man |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
Thank you Bill. You write a mean dance!!!  I'll try to write. JM-I am afraid to post the things I write. They are more emotionally graphic than the things I see here and I don't want to offend or be kicked off the board. [This message has been edited by amusemi (02-27-2002 12:26 AM).] |
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RosePetal 
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
Hey there! You're poem was so well-written, I always wish I could write like that! So much imagry and feeling!!! My stuff is always a rhyme |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
I understand how you feel.... In this poem and about some of your poems not being able to post them : ) I have many that I would never share.. Love to You Connie |
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peaches73533 Senior Member
since 2001-11-04
Posts 981OK, USA |
I hope this feeling doesn't stay forever.This is a sad but powerful write.Your writing puts me in awe. peaches |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
much meaning in your words..and I too believe that honesty certainly is always deserved. *s I enjoyed every thought. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
For there is nothing left to bleed I folded long ago So crucify Take voodoo pins Wreak blizzards and rains Flood me with seas There's nothing left to take from me I only needed honesty Just one person to reach When I was in need... strong lines..and I agree entirely with JM... |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Heartfelt and heartbreaking...I know this place you've been...keep writing and you will find the place of which you seek where peace and love can again fill your heart and soul....Magnificent writing...**big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
amusemi - ouch, I can feel the pain in this one. well done. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
quote: I know that place--dark despair and hopelessness. ~sigh~ It isn't even a tunnel you can walk out of, but a cold damp pit that you cannot get out of, and requires someone to remove the cover to let the light in... Very well done amusemi! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) This is so very heartaching, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you and your tears! (big hugggsssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, ay sincere compassionate love fill your heart and may you find all your heart desires and deserves! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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