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Decaflame
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0 posted 2002-02-26 10:41 PM



Just a name

I had always imagined
Hope to be a lifeline
A tethered balloon bouncing
With a gaseous gift
Of going upward,
Colored circus red
And if
Hope could talk
It would shimmer with the
Sound of childhood…

I was full of
Hope for a long life
With just one man, to create
That ever-after phenomenon
As I was raised,
Taught to cherish, holding
Forever dear

But that one man found
Hope in someone
Other than me, your
Name being just that four
Lettered word, stringing
Him along like a tethered
Balloon bouncing,
Lips colored circus red,

While I simmered with
The sound of childhood
Around me…

Hope may have taken
Him, but she
Left me
Anticipation in what
I could do
On my own.


© Copyright 2002 Decaflame - All Rights Reserved
BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
1 posted 2002-02-26 10:48 PM


Ironically, I was thinking on a childhood,
in my youth, over the years kind of poem.

This was just great!

ecrivan
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2 posted 2002-02-26 11:09 PM


childhood voices come back to me occasionally
too nice write!


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with you
3 posted 2002-02-26 11:17 PM


wow.......   
such strength in these words....
glad to see a post from you tonight

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
4 posted 2002-02-26 11:24 PM


WoW!  Nice to see you tonight!
Powerful thoughts here...left me staring at the screen with my own memories of simmering.
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

Janet Marie
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5 posted 2002-02-27 12:06 PM


And if
Hope could talk
It would shimmer with the
Sound of childhood
============================

Decca my dear ....tis of verses like that above... that I fly into your flame
welcome back *S*

"Never made it as a wise man
couldn't cut it as a poor man stealin
Tired of livin like a blind man
sick of sight without a sense of feelin"

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6 posted 2002-02-27 12:58 PM


Yup, what she said! This was fantastic, and nice to see tonight before I left.

~* Imagination is more important than knowledge *~

Einstein


nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
7 posted 2002-02-27 07:24 AM


We have too much in common, except the childrens voices I was surrounded by were my many nieces, nephews and students.

Where ya been hiding Miss Flame?  *s

M

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8 posted 2002-02-27 08:03 AM


Bravo!! Very nicely told....
Nan
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9 posted 2002-02-27 08:22 AM


On your own... The sky's the limit...or perhaps the sun...Nicely done..
RSWells
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10 posted 2002-02-27 10:03 AM


This baloon in short time no doubt deflated
it lacked the heat your flame would give it rise.
Enjoyed

Martie
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11 posted 2002-02-27 11:34 AM


Hi Deca...good to see you and this look into feelings so well done!
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12 posted 2002-02-27 06:55 PM




(big hugggssssss) Oh my gosh, this is soooooo beautifully expressive, sweet friend, this too had me reflecting on my youth and how all I ever wanted was to fly away from all the abuse and depression I was lost in! (sigh) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is excellent! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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13 posted 2002-03-12 12:37 PM


This definately deserves a bump!

This is powerful writing with an equally strong message for all to take heed from.
You use great imagery and a theme to convey your thoughts well.
Maybe this moved me so much because I see a glimmer of myself in your words.

Yes, this is a keeper

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

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14 posted 2002-03-12 02:16 PM


This is one of your best, Deca... from the incredible images of the first verse to the strength of the last... simply superb. *S*
RMW
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15 posted 2002-03-12 02:26 PM


Brave words, that "...slip the surly bonds of earth..." Well done. Bob
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Deep in the heart
16 posted 2002-03-12 03:31 PM


Anticipation

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By the sea
17 posted 2002-03-12 04:18 PM


Both sadness and strength portrayed in this fine piece of writing, Deca.  Nice to see you!  

Michael

Stars will shine when I am gone
Earth will spin on as before
Gulls still race along the shore
Morning star, still kiss the dawn

~ M. Auguste

Gentle Spirit
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18 posted 2002-03-12 08:12 PM


A very powerful write Deca.  It is wonderful to see you back again!

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

Decaflame
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19 posted 2002-03-22 08:57 AM



There are some wonderful comments here.  Thank you all very much for giving up some time out of your day to read this.

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