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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Lift the veil from eyes, That for so long hid your soul Pierce the cruel disguise, Shatter the screen icy cold, See beneath if you’re so bold. Open the dark room’s door, That has stayed shut for so long, You’ve been not before And you know you don’t belong, See beyond if you’re so bold. Feel the fear of life, Where a dirge is happy tune, Loneliness a knife, And you’ve here come much too soon, You've peered because you are bold. Run from this dark sight, Leave in unbridled fleeing, Knowing it’s not right, This place too soon you’re seeing, You erred in being so bold. Gloom Death is a friend to some, but only fools search it out, bravado taunts. |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
...but behind the darkness bides a glimmer of light.. just waiting to shine..  |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
This is a keeper .... I can read many meanings into this...... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Nicely done Gloom... many points to ponder... |
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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
Yes, a keeper as are all your words...Professor. Not sure if bold, is Alice called because she hides in mirrors' like and in disguise she words her thoughts between the lines, key fingers strike. Beneath the cold of frosted glass a window opens, cracks for need, fresh of air in which does rise the blueness, two of eyes, to feed. Doors shut tight can be pried, too or is that pride she's thinking of. Oh well, she's not been visited by darkness yet nor words of love. Belonging is a longing word escaping shadows of life's fear. Never run from words alone that pierce the heart when bold in air. Death comes too soon, as we all know. So "climb the tree", enjoy the show. *s ~A~ As you would say, this is fictional...and inspiring [This message has been edited by Alicethruglass (02-26-2002 10:32 AM).] |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Nan, Are you sure? Perhaps that’s just the sparkle of eyes looking back. Thank you, Zinsser, You are very kind with your praise Thank you, Cpat Hair, If I’ve made you think and ponder Then that is high praise indeed. Thank you, Alicethuglass, I’m not much for tree climbing But enjoy a good poetic response. Gloom |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You are my inspiration, A! I love the gothic tone of this and the message as well. |
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