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Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2002-02-26 05:43 AM


today again
I talked to God about you
and how I feel born again now
like the first time
and how our adultery
is a blessing
that makes me believe
in heaven again

I know he knows you
have seen him looking
at your eyes
and your walk ways
have heard him talk
to the flowers
about your perfume
and how they could do better

he gave me a gift of dreams
that never let me touch you
I was free to watch
and stand outside
where you had your back to me
and didn't even know
I was there
except you felt me

like you had known me once
before somewhere
and always wondered
whatever happened
when I went away
and didn't come back
or write
God woke me with his laughter

before you ever met me...


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SEA
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with you
1 posted 2002-02-26 09:43 AM


"he gave me a gift of dreams
that never let me touch you

I was free to watch
and stand outside
where you had your back to me
and didn't even know
I was there
except you felt me

like you had known me once
before somewhere
and always wondered
whatever happened
when I went away
and didn't come back
or write

God woke me with his laughter

before you ever met me... "

D,
your writing amazes me....
completely.

and this part here, goes deeper than any words I have...
saving this....

Greeneyes
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In Your Poetic Mind
2 posted 2002-02-26 10:36 AM


DS~

It is amazing the gifts that life can bring, and how some touch us so differenty then others..(of course).....

I continue to watch as the raven flies over my soul, and deems the words that bring us poetry....softer touches...ya know I enjoy this....


Lauren~

Greeneyes~

Step through the
barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into the shadows
of my heart

Martie
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3 posted 2002-02-26 11:13 AM


DS

This came from a truth place
where sometimes words have their way

Well done!

[This message has been edited by Martie (02-26-2002 12:09 PM).]

rwood
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since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793
Tennessee
4 posted 2002-02-26 11:39 AM


I believe you have wakened a place deep within us all. Except your voice and your verse just expresses the soul of it better than I could possibly say. Spirit words D...touching and very loving.

Sincerely,
Regina

Indigo
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since 2001-05-17
Posts 602

5 posted 2002-02-26 11:46 AM


gift of dreams offer
new vision for jaded eyes
belief in the heart


Who knows why some people cross our life path... whether this life or a previous one.
But I think we sense them when they do.  Insightful and heartfelt, DS.  Loved this...

Indigo


serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
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6 posted 2002-02-26 12:50 PM


This is fantastic. without going into detail, let's just say I can relate. This is a keeper for me! Bravo, my friend!
BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23
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By the Seaside
7 posted 2002-02-26 04:59 PM


he gave me a gift of dreams
that never let me touch you
I was free to watch
and stand outside
where you had your back to me
and didn't even know
I was there
except you felt me

Nice touch in this phrase~
some things we just know
and never feel ...
likewise some things we feel
but never know the way they touch another.
Always a good write from you DS.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
8 posted 2002-02-26 05:17 PM


Dark, I understand this.
It touches me some place deep within my soul.
Excellent write!
Enjoyed, and I'm keeping this!
~Hugs and Sighs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
9 posted 2002-02-26 05:19 PM


SEA, a place in the heart
feels things
that our hands don't recognize

thank you for your eyes here

Lauren, ravens are white sometimes
when they fly close to the sun

thank you

Ms Martie, truth places are recognized by
true place eyes, thank you for yours

Rwood, spirit words, we share them
sometimes we say them without our voices
I appreciate you here

Indigo ms your eyes on the word voices are
a gift of dreams, thank you for your eyes

Serenity, we are one when you relate
to the images of our souls, we are one then
thank you so much

Lori, when we just know it
from feelings,
it is a thousand words better
than one word
thank you so much

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA
10 posted 2004-06-19 11:09 PM


I'm glad that I decided to look through your archive of poems....I relate to this and am in love with this poem.  You're fast becoming one of my favourite poets at Passions...you have such a rare talent.

Melissa~

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
11 posted 2007-10-24 05:51 PM


I was tempted tonight to go diving in your archives and found such incredible treasures!!

Outstanding work.

Take the bow of my heart.

Love,
Margherita

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
12 posted 2007-10-24 06:03 PM


ms honeybee, thank you

__________
ms mar, transparent seams
would be heavenly
thank you

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
13 posted 2008-02-12 03:11 PM


quote:
he gave me a gift of dreams
that never let me touch you
I was free to watch
and stand outside
where you had your back to me
and didn't even know
I was there
except you felt me

like you had known me once
before somewhere
and always wondered
whatever happened
when I went away
and didn't come back
or write
God woke me with his laughter

before you ever met me...

You write truth well enough...

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
14 posted 2008-02-12 04:41 PM


ms sun...wish you were here in the warm..thanks babe
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