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GhostWriter_6
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0 posted 2002-02-25 10:00 AM




i was born influenced , told the world was mine, never take the first offer because its never the truest,
at any moment ghost could loose it. the end for us was apparent, you were my lady, and now were both parents.
the path you took was far from the one we walked together, now i treat you like a hitchhiker on the highway in bad weather. i see your face and i say "do i know this lady, the face looks familiar, thinking about it is driving me crazy. living in the same city with so much drama and chaos, day and days pass and i wish from my life i could take a day off. the realest memories we've made together, the worst could have been better,my eyes get so dry from the tears that depart, the first and last time that i had a broken heart. such an ill feeling when you are faced with situation, you were number one but now you are 2nd, best a conselation.
seeing you and rememberng what things used to be, now i cant even try, ive deleted you out of long term memory. was i obsessed fo a moment, what happend to come over me, i kept every note,every letter that you sent to me, only to learn that you also would become my enemy. remember the 2 roses that you gave me a symbol of us, to show me that our relationship was love and not a fit of lust, but since you betrayed me, who can i trust, you were the last human on earth who i gave the trust label, only to realize the lies you told couldnt even retain the title stable. you made it null and void like everyone else around me, never will a true love find me. maybe its a curse that was placed upon me at birth, when worst came to worst, i was your co-defender, we were like bonnie and clyde a modern day version,so many things to forget now that i dont know this person, reflections of the way life used to be for me, now its like deja` vu, and dismissed just like a memory.

© Copyright 2002 Antonio Marquis Bankhead - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-02-25 11:16 AM


Like several parts of this, but find it hard to read as poetry without line breaks...now having said that..I know it is my problem with structure not yours...

some nice strong images in here..and a story..I always like stories..( grinning)



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2 posted 2002-02-25 12:00 PM


Hey Antonio,

It's been a while since I've read your work.
So you're still having troubles? Sorry to hear that man! I believe that things will fall into place at some point, hold on!

GhostWriter_6
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3 posted 2002-02-25 12:47 PM


sorry about not having line breaks.. but thank you for reading my poem.. and rosepetal things are really better.. and things are straight.. i just got stories to tell and i want to share them with my peoples
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