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Martie
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0 posted 2002-02-24 02:13 PM



The Sky Admirer
(This is from a long time ago, but I was reminded of it by mirror man's, "circumstance 11"

Sometimes I wish
that I could find
an empty land
where I could stand
pure
in the desert dust,
swim on a glass lake.
I could be
a serene swan
or a lily,
the sky my admirer.

But one lone lily
hears no laughter,
a swan
in a lake without ripples
feels no touch
and the sky does not admire me
I admire the sky.

Still, sometimes I wish
that I could find
an empty land
that I could fill,
where sweet stars fall
and noble deeds grow
and songs sing each to each
and home is the heart.


© Copyright 2002 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
amusemi
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1 posted 2002-02-24 02:18 PM


A reverent piece, Martie!!  Well done.
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2 posted 2002-02-24 02:19 PM


"a swan
in a lake without ripples
feels no touch"


LOVE that line Martie, this is wonderful

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3 posted 2002-02-24 02:19 PM


Martie.. i wish the same for myself... sometimes I wish I could build me a castle made from the strongest of loves.. (and none of that cheap imitation crap neither!)
where I could drift in the boundless sapphire sky forever at peace.
Perhaps we shall find this peace one day. I wish you godspeed  

God alone is alone. Man is not.

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4 posted 2002-02-24 02:20 PM




(smiles) Awwwwwww, this is soooooo beautifully touching, sweet friend, I love swans so much, this is a beautifully inspiring piece of sheer elegance! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, may we all fly to joy and bliss! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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5 posted 2002-02-24 02:38 PM



Thank goodness for those who not only inspire, but remind...

I don't recall this one...must have been one of those fast days...

thanks for bringing it back to us...

rerun it again a year from now...

Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2002-02-24 02:41 PM


Martie,
Well said.

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7 posted 2002-02-24 02:47 PM


Gosh, Martie, I don't know what to say.  

Still, sometimes I wish
that I could find
an empty land
that I could fill,
where sweet stars fall
and noble deeds grow
and songs sing each to each
and home is the heart.

If I inspired you to even repost this, I am greatly honored.  Thank you very much.

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8 posted 2002-02-24 02:54 PM


But one lone lily
hears no laughter,
a swan
in a lake without ripples
feels no touch
and the sky does not admire me
I admire the sky.
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anytime the sky is in the title of one of your writes...I know your muse is on high and the poem will make me sigh...
and this is and this did

Madame Chipmunk
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9 posted 2002-02-24 06:22 PM


This is very beautiful, Martie...

But one lone lily
hears no laughter,
a swan
in a lake without ripples
feels no touch
and the sky does not admire me
I admire the sky.

excellent imagery!

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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10 posted 2002-02-24 07:55 PM


Beautiful as always sweet lady....
and, the sky does admire you!
Just as all of us here at Passions admire you!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

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11 posted 2002-02-24 07:59 PM


*sigh* I don't think I can ever get used to admiring the gentleness you weave into everything you write...this is beautiful...now I am going to search for the poem that inspired it...I am so glad that it did...**big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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12 posted 2002-02-24 08:01 PM


This reminds me of someone quite special to me...thanks for sharing this, Martie...incredibly beautiful images!  I love it!

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And though my heart feels all alone without you
I still hear you sing to me
I still hear your voice on the sea...

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13 posted 2002-02-24 08:05 PM


Beautiful! Thank you for sharing it.
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14 posted 2002-02-24 09:43 PM


Martie~
You are just amazing~

'But one lone lily
hears no laughter,
a swan
in a lake without ripples
feels no touch
and the sky does not admire me
I admire the sky.'


AND .... I admire YOU sweet poetess~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
         noles1@totcon.com                    

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15 posted 2002-02-25 01:12 AM


I know someone in the sky that admires you just as much as I do.  Simply beautiful Martie.

~* Imagination is more important than knowledge *~

Einstein


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16 posted 2002-02-25 09:16 AM


Martie, this is pure poetry. Lovely. floria

Floria

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But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

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17 posted 2002-02-25 11:17 AM


Bravo!!! Poetic musing at its best!


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