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SEA

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with you

0 posted 2002-02-24 02:09 PM

in the inner stillness
somewhere just out of reach
I felt your footsteps
fall upon my beach

music played the tune
the night sang off key
wind sighed….softly cried
touched the heart of me

memories were stirred
dancing with tomorrow’s history
unable to change the fact
you remain a part of me

echoes whispered back and forth
from heart back out to sea
endlessly repeating
this haunting melody

~SEA~

amusemi
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since 2001-12-08

Posts 1262
A State of Disarray

1 posted 2002-02-24 02:16 PM

memories were stirred
dancing with tomorrow’s history
unable to change the fact
you remain a part of me

I feel this way about the ocean.

Wonderful write SEA~

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

2 posted 2002-02-24 02:16 PM

(sigh) Soooooooo hauntingly beautiful, sweet friend, may you forever hold many precious memories close to your heart and may they forever bring smiles to your heart forever! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is another timeless beauty! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Susan, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

3 posted 2002-02-24 02:44 PM

Sea,
Excellent write. Beautifully done.

Sunshine

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Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2002-02-24 02:49 PM

SEA, the staccato sound I heard in the read of this lent itself to a heartbeat...did you know that? It does...

and it's a Keeper...

1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

5 posted 2002-02-24 02:53 PM

damn girl !!!... (can i say that?)....giggle...this is excellent...helen

Martie

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California

6 posted 2002-02-24 04:30 PM

Sea

"in the inner stillness
somewhere just out of reach
I felt your footsteps
fall upon my beach"

The lovely sigh in this one I understand. Beautiful!

Auguste

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since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

7 posted 2002-02-24 05:12 PM

I'm keeping this, it's mine. Everyone, get keep your hands off. LOL

Your writing to truly wonderful, Susan (((hugs)))

Michael

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

8 posted 2002-02-25 11:20 AM

ah yes..those things that remain a part of us... very nicely done Sea... nicely done indeed.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

9 posted 2002-02-25 11:35 AM

Oh Sue! This is truly beautiful! I do agree with Karilea...it does have the sound, beat and feel of a heart beat. Wonderful!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

Marsha

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since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

10 posted 2002-02-25 11:40 AM

Circe darling girl Oh my stars this is utterly utterly wonderful really lovely writing, YOU have brought such a smile of remembrance to me face and I do love to smile you know. Not all memories are bad, and the good ones I keep. The bad ones I let fade away like sea foam, insubstantial for they have nothing to keep them alive.

I love the flow of this it’s soooooooo smooth, abide awhile with your butterfly

This is wonderful

YOU are such a wonderful writer

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79

strbbux
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since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

11 posted 2002-02-25 01:53 PM

"memories were stirred
dancing with tomorrow’s history"

such beautiful lines in here Sea. I love this, floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Interloper

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since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

12 posted 2002-02-25 03:27 PM

I walked on your beach
you have trod upon my heart
now we walk alone

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

13 posted 2002-02-25 03:39 PM

echoes whispered back and forth
from heart back out to sea

This is a simply beatiful read. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

butterflykiss989
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since 2002-02-19

Posts 52

14 posted 2002-02-25 03:43 PM

Well I dont know what else I can say everyone has seemed to expess the same setiments I would... beautiful.

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

15 posted 2002-02-25 09:08 PM

You do love the beach...as you once said...
and your poetry reflects it...NICE, Sue...

Lucie
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since 1999-06-20

Posts 1077
Houston

16 posted 2002-02-26 10:10 AM

This touched me.. It held many different levels of meaning and I think I would have to read it many more times to feel and savor each and every one. Wonderful.. this one goes to favorites.

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

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USA

17 posted 2002-02-26 10:14 AM

enjoyed

passing shadows
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displaced

18 posted 2002-03-02 04:28 PM

I love this one!

rosepetals25

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PA

19 posted 2002-03-02 04:32 PM

Susan,

There is nothing I can say that I haven't said before. This is wonderful

I enjoyed as always.

Hugs,
Tara

"My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read"
- Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home

catalinamoon

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since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

20 posted 2002-03-02 08:35 PM

Susan, as one who walks the Shores of Alone, I am feelng myself right in the heart of this poem. It is a beautiful thing, when someone's writing can lead you right into the place you love the most.
Thanks for all your kindness recently, too.
Sandra

SEA

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since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

21 posted 2002-03-02 09:05 PM

thank you all very much., Sandra....I know what you are feeling in a universal loss of one you love sort of way, and while your hurt is unique, it's shared with those who care about you.

thank you, I am pleased you liked this one

Nan

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since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

22 posted 2002-03-03 06:08 PM

A mellifluent melody indeed.. This is lovely, Sea..

Lia Fail
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since 2002-02-26

Posts 80

23 posted 2002-03-03 07:00 PM

Sea... speechless...no words."OUTSTANDING."
Standing Ovation!!!!

Lia

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

24 posted 2002-03-03 07:11 PM

echoes whispered back and forth
from heart back out to sea
endlessly repeating
this haunting melody

SEA~ Do you know how much I adore your poetry? Your words speak so clearly and are always so relevant to me.

Must be something about the page we're on.
Lovely lovely~

Dee
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since 2000-08-19

Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia

25 posted 2002-03-04 03:52 AM

Sue, this really touches my heart. I didn't feel the link to the sea as much as the memories that won't fade.
Your words are wonderful as usual. Loved it.

Dee

I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

26 posted 2002-03-04 09:34 AM

unable to change the fact
you remain a part of me

echoes whispered back and forth
from heart back out to sea
endlessly repeating
this haunting melody

Absolutely beautiful, SEA... the rhythm of the waves is woven into your words... this is one of your best!

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