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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I am now lost in land of words a trace of nail--syllable heard... quartered time in rhyme absurd I'm lost now in the land of word. A wall is broken in my mind. A brick is broken--hole divine... a shallow ledge of freedom cries-- a broken brick of hole refined. A spark of edge on cement wall-- one spark makes shadows stand too tall... upon a ledge in fear of fall, a cement wall leaves spark of edge. [This message has been edited by serenity (02-24-2002 05:07 AM).] |
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Contabo Member
since 2001-11-21
Posts 159 |
This is being so much more in poem. I am speaking so much of it in my mind. Contabo |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
If you are lost, then who's leading this group?  Enjoyed this my dear. |
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peaches73533 Senior Member
since 2001-11-04
Posts 981OK, USA |
You aren't lost just a little detoured.Nicely done. Peaches |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Bricks - walls, what a whole you have created  Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What Contabo said...this is more than a poem! Doggone girl, but you do inspire! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I am now lost in land of words a trace of nail--syllable heard... quartered time in rhyme absurd I'm lost now in the land of word. ====================================== welcome to my world baby this is a deep layered write me twin... love the metaphors and poetic tie ins to the emotion. Much to read between the lines here me dear.. all there as a view of true ... heres to looking at the hues of you.  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Lost? Perhaps...but if lost in that land of word, you indeed are mapping out a way for the rest of us... love the beginning lines... good stuff my friend |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
See, that's why I always try to drop breadcrumbs. |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Oh Duncan above said it best, nice write Serenity, floria Floria |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks all, just a bit of me, turning myself inside out again! I'm glad you enjoyed. Hugs to forum! |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
Damn... you and those titles... a spark of edge... some of the concepts/language you come up with Karen, just amazes me... this makes me think of someone so intent on explaining but lost in language, and buried in frustration... or... so lost to themselves and the outside world that words are like razor snowflakes, impossible to touch and carry; elusive and biting... or perhaps just a woman running circles in her own mind so long she is feeling faint and afraid of falling, without the word to cry that calls her heart to help... Hmm. What a prisoner of mind can see... sometimes it allows for a beautifully spoken kind of madness... and you live that, honey. Hugs, K... you mold the chaos poetic... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
meg? I love you, yanno.  |
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