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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2002-02-24 02:55 AM


damn you...
god damn you...
I hate my refrain.
another
day older
another day's pain...
damn you,
g'damn you,
as I still remain...
no thing left to smolder--
no ash reverse rain.
There's nothing,
elliptical
crayoning me--
there's nothing--
no nothing--
no thing left of me.

© Copyright 2002 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
Kethry
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1 posted 2002-02-24 03:40 AM


Karen,
powerful write here darlin'. Full of angst and anger. Well done
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Contabo
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2 posted 2002-02-24 07:27 AM


There is power in so little.

There can be weakness in over much.

Very good.

Contabo

Rex Allen McCoy
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Sippin a Timmy's in London
3 posted 2002-02-24 08:29 AM


You can holler at me if it'l help
I don't mind

Actually you'd be doing my wife a favor ... her voice is sounding a little horse

peaches73533
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4 posted 2002-02-24 09:20 AM


Powerful write.Anytime you want to scream, yell, or holler send it my way.
Peaches

catalinamoon
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5 posted 2002-02-24 10:05 AM


Oh yeah,I know what you mean. Stong stuff, girl.
Sandra

ecrivan
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my own state
6 posted 2002-02-24 10:26 AM


keep with the serenity and blow the bad vibes here!


Cpat Hair
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7 posted 2002-02-25 11:43 AM


damn you...
god damn you...
I hate my refrain.
another
day older
another day's pain...
damn you,
g'damn you,
as I still remain...
no thing left to smolder--
no ash reverse rain


powerful lyrical angst... some days we curse our own... some days we curse others...

RosePetal
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8 posted 2002-02-25 12:03 PM


i'm really feeling this poem! release that anger serenity!!
BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
9 posted 2002-02-25 01:49 PM


Well damn I like the way you vent!  


Spirit Of Twilight
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10 posted 2002-02-25 02:04 PM


Powerful and intense. I never thought "damning" could be so poetic!
Thanks for sharing!
Neha

serenity blaze
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11 posted 2002-02-25 03:01 PM


aw geez...I have typed out another tirade...thanks all, for tolerating my poetic foot stomping! chuckling, I was a little annoyed when I wrote this...sigh...

Thanks again! I feel better now.

Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
12 posted 2002-02-25 03:54 PM


...yikes - don't give me flashbacks like that - thought you were one of my ex's!!!

well - you certainly didn't hold too much back here, did ya karen?

*gulp*

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