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Duncan
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0 posted 2002-02-22 12:29 PM




Ease back
into me
lose yourself
with desire
for my touch

or we could do a crossword

it doesn’t matter what we do
just come home
I miss you

© Copyright 2002 Duncan - All Rights Reserved
Marsha
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1 posted 2002-02-22 12:38 PM


Duncan darling boy this is utterly utterly outstandingly good. I love this write from you. How can you say so much with so few words, YOU constantly amaze me.

This is seriously excellent writing, the flow of this is perfect, the internal pace and the construction cannot be bettered


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

:kiss

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79


RMW
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2 posted 2002-02-22 12:54 PM


Duncan...I am embarrassed to say that this is the first of your postings that I've read. My loss. That will be rectified. Nicely done. Bob
Janet Marie
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3 posted 2002-02-22 01:26 PM


Ease back
into me
lose yourself
with desire
for my touch
=======================

ok..ya got me......
*sigh*  

ya know Duncan...."men of few words" are usually a sore spot for me  LOL ....
but you make an art out of brievity.
You take the "less is more" lesson to a higher level....
at that altitude...one can only breath deep ....

rosepetals25
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4 posted 2002-02-22 01:31 PM


Duncan,

       You are one of the romantics here that make me sigh every time.   This is so touching.. so simple.  Wonderful

Hugs,
Tara
  

"My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read"
     - Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home

J. K. Mitchell
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5 posted 2002-02-22 01:37 PM


A plea of the heart.
I like this.

walker
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6 posted 2002-02-22 02:03 PM


Love can be enjoyed in so many ways, she'll be back soon D, then you can do either one or both
Nightshade
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just out of reach
7 posted 2002-02-22 02:04 PM


just come home
I miss you

I love these words.
Very much enjoyed. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Cpat Hair
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8 posted 2002-02-22 04:02 PM


nicely said... concise, and well formed. Good stuff.


CocoBaci
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9 posted 2002-02-22 04:11 PM


A delightful and sweet read PoetFriendDuncan...

*~coco~*

catalinamoon
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10 posted 2002-02-22 04:17 PM


Duncan, that first bit was steamy..
Sure would make me come home.
Sandra

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11 posted 2002-02-22 05:28 PM




(sigh) You are soooooo romantic, sweet friend, such soft yearning fills your words! (big hugggsssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, may you froever hold true love close to your heart! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Duncan, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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12 posted 2002-02-22 06:04 PM


I have little doubt she will love this one, good sir. No wonder she fell for you
Sunshine
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13 posted 2002-02-22 07:29 PM



A flexible fellow...I like that!  And I like this!

SEA
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with you
14 posted 2002-02-22 07:42 PM


sigh.....
dear Cowboy
how could she possibly refuse?!
makes me want to come running

Titia Geertman
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15 posted 2002-02-22 07:43 PM


WOW, I always love your short verses, they say so much.

A delightful poem, Sir.

Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Check out my new website: lookheretitia.fcpages.com (I didn't 'link' this, so it won't take too much space).I

Enchantress
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16 posted 2002-02-22 07:47 PM


Ya have to like a guy who gets right to the point.  Well said and I hope she comes home soon!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Love, like magic, depends on believing.~

Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now
17 posted 2002-02-22 07:51 PM


Duncan - My words go out to you in hope that what you write will happen...

BC

Duncan
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18 posted 2002-02-23 12:23 PM


Marsha
Thanks!  I think I liked your response better than my poem.  lol

Bob
Nice to meet you and Thanks!

JM
LOL @ you.  Brevity only exists in my poetry.  Where, yes, I think the 'less is more' thing works well for me.  Btw...Thanks for reading between the lines in my last post.  You got it!

Tara
Now, that makes me smile!  Thanks.

JK Mitchell
Thanks, yes it is.

walker
In so many ways!  Thanks...as always!

Nightshade
Thank you so much!

Ron
Hell, I'm just glad to see you back for awhile!  Thanks.

Coco
Thanks...you're sweet, yourself!

Sandra
Yeah, I was tempted to continue on a bit with that first verse...then thought not.  lol  Thank you.

Noah
Soft yearning, I like that.  Thanks!

Balladeer
I am good, huh?  LMAO  Seriously though, she does seem to bring out the best of me.

Sunshine
Like Gumby!  Thank you.

SEA
She's only away on business, was just missing her (it's been over 24 hours!!  lol) and put it to pen.  I love it when I make you sigh.

Titia
So nice to see you, again.  Thanks as always.

Nancy
It was really the only thing I could feel, so was easy to get to the point.  Thanks!

BC
She'll be back on Sunday.  Was just indulging in a bit of melancholy.  Now, if I can just find something to do for the next 48 hours!


Siofra
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19 posted 2002-02-23 12:58 PM


Just thought you'd like to know that I sent this as an e-card to someone using the wonderful e-card feature here at Passions.

It spoke my mind perfectly...

"My ears have not yet drunk a hundred words
Of that tongue’s uttering, yet I know the sound:" "Romeo and Juliet"

Duncan
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20 posted 2002-02-23 01:06 AM


Thank you, Siofra...I don't think that's ever happened to me before.  Thank you very much.
Larry C
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21 posted 2002-02-23 02:03 AM


Duncan,
You too? My sweetie is visiting the grandkids in Michigan! Nice write friend.

vlraynes
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22 posted 2002-02-24 12:31 PM



Duncan-
Gotta love those crosswords! LOL!
Seriously...I love this.
How could anyone resist.
Very well done.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Midnitesun
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Gaia
23 posted 2002-02-24 12:49 PM


I miss you too. Oops. I'm pretty sure you meant Tracey, not Kacy. Stay here at the board. We can keep you busy for a few hours.
peaches73533
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24 posted 2002-02-24 01:08 AM


You have said so much from your heart with so few words.No wonder why you stile her heart.
Peaches

Spirit Of Twilight
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25 posted 2002-02-24 02:28 AM


This is exquisitely done. Keep writing!

Neha

amusemi
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26 posted 2002-02-24 02:14 PM


Sweet     You must show this to her upon her return.
RosePetal
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27 posted 2002-02-24 02:27 PM


awwww, who could resist such a request from you! I surely couldnt, Don't tell noah i said that lol.
Startime
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28 posted 2002-02-24 08:22 PM


By now she should be home and in your arms where you will show her how much you missed her....a wonderful poem...I love it...**big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Tracey
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29 posted 2002-02-24 09:07 PM


Hi honey I’m home…did you notice I was gone??? Guess so huh?? You know I only go away so you can miss me. Lmao. Now help me with that crossword, I can’t get 26 down, or 38 across, or…

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

ThisDiamond
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30 posted 2002-02-24 09:15 PM


Duncan, I always look at the write, as well as read it...
You made a candle...a guiding light back.
Nice. ThisDiamond

strbbux
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31 posted 2002-02-25 10:39 AM


Duncan I do love how you write, You say so much in such a few words. Difficult to do and turn out this nice. great write. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

passing shadows
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32 posted 2002-03-02 04:17 PM



Kethry
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33 posted 2002-03-02 04:23 PM


Duncan,
crosswords are good as long as they're not cross words.
Keth

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Gentle Spirit
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34 posted 2002-03-02 05:30 PM


so much said with so few words.  well done Duncan.  

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

Bridget Shenachie
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35 posted 2002-03-07 01:08 AM


Duncan!

This is an impressive bit of writing tight and getting in right!  It was a delightful read.  Thanks for sharing it with us.  I've really enjoyed your poems.

Shenachie

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