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Open Poetry #19

The break-up

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 2002-02-22 01:58 AM

Lonesome lips lapped the stale air.
Feverish and delirious,
I dipped my quill into a cup of coffee.
Gray hands
of smoke
fondled the strands of my hair.
The room crumbled,
shrinking
and shriveling into a coffin.
I ripped open the envelopes of the widow-frames.
You’ve left me,
and this time,
I’m sure, you will not return.
In the sizzling hearth, verses rose into flames,
and the heart, dejected, continued to burn.
Raging winds
scattered ashes across the room.
With everything spinning out of proportion,
I fell to the floor,
and the forlorn moon
pulled my tears like the tides of a storming ocean…

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[This message has been edited by Master (02-22-2002 02:01 AM).]

strbbux
Member Elite

since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

1 posted 2002-02-22 10:53 AM

This has to be brought back to the top. It is a good write, floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

2 posted 2002-02-23 11:53 PM

Master-
I love this...the imagery is excellent!
Very well done!
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

peaches73533
Senior Member

since 2001-11-04

Posts 981
OK, USA

3 posted 2002-02-24 12:19 PM

Very well written and nice use of imagery.
Peaches

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

4 posted 2002-02-24 12:27 PM

Your title caught my eye. Your poem captured that side of a break-up very well! Impressive.

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