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Sunshine
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0 posted 2002-02-21 09:04 PM



Just thinking on paper

if I were to be obscurely
obtuse then I most certainly
would not be luculent

and I think you would agree

and if you suffered
Don Juanism
no way could I care

but you would make me care

and if we were to
be fantabulous
you could be one
and I the other

and then we could interchange

and it seems
that everything
under the sun
has been known
to the sun and
is not new to
the sun

and I would have to agree

but it would not make
me love you less

and then we get down to
the real banter
of the evening
the give and take
of my taking of
your giving
but when will you
take up my giving

for I do, you know

give, that is

so my mind wanders because
it's tired of being here right now,
listening to the
same tape of talk
that won't change and
refuses to stick enough
so I could pull it out
and be rid of it once
and for all

and I think, had I
been born on 12/12/15
instead of 12/12/51 I would
have perhaps known in person
a really famous person
but I have to be content
that God had dyslexia
that day and I was planted
here 36 years later
so I really only knew Sinatra
through movies and music
and such as that, and
of course,
through my mother's eyes

but to share with him
two out of three
ain't bad

so I guess if I let my
thoughts keep rambling
like the tumbleweed it is,
perhaps it will cross over
some land where a cowboy
wrote a note and lost it in
the rainstorm where it stuck
to a smaller weed and me,
tumbling along, would
eventually spear that ratty
scrap of paper and carry
love letters on into another
county…

Kansas style romance
bites the dust

can't you just read the
headline

and he comes in and wants
to know "when will you get
tired of it all" and I just look at
him and sigh and turn back to
reading and writing and not being
tired of it at all…

isn't that strange?

if I were to be obscurely
obtuse then I most certainly
would not be luculent

and I think you would agree

and if you suffered
Don Juanism
no way could I care

but you would make me care

and if we were to
be fantabulous
you could be one
and I the other

and
wouldn't it be nice?
gets stuck in my head….



12.02.00
Time for a Repost


© Copyright 2002 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Duncan
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1 posted 2002-02-21 09:37 PM


and if we were to
be fantabulous
you could be one
and I the other

and
wouldn't it be nice?
gets stuck in my head….


The understatement of the last verse is striking.  I really like this alot.
It was fun to read and easy to dance to, so I give it a 10!

Enchantress
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2 posted 2002-02-21 09:46 PM


LOL@Duncan and I ditto his reply.
It has a great beat and I can even 'hand jive' to it!  Oh, you wouldn't remember the 'hand jive'.  Kinda dance with you hands when you had to be sitting down.  Oh dear I can feel a ramble coming on...I had better go!  Karilea, this is way cool and a fun read!  Needed it tonight.
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Love, like magic, depends on believing.~

HelmutB
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3 posted 2002-02-21 09:49 PM


And here I thought I was already stuck there, just kidding.
I really like it, very nice Sunshine
Very

The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


doreen peri
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4 posted 2002-02-21 09:52 PM


that was fantastic!!!!

(i really love the god having lysdexia part!)

Startime
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5 posted 2002-02-21 11:02 PM


*giggling* I love it when you are thinking on paper...this is wonderful...I got totally caught up in it...**big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Mistletoe Angel
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6 posted 2002-02-21 11:36 PM




(smiles) Wow, this is amazing, I just love the way you ramble, I felt as though I was drifting on a stagecoach through Kansas seeing all that you can see, this is wonderful! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is fantastic! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you@!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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7 posted 2002-02-21 11:48 PM


How you ramble, girl! Isn't it interesting how an unrestrained mind can produce such wonderful poetry just by doing what comes naturally....I enjoyed following your thoughts!
amusemi
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8 posted 2002-02-22 12:15 PM


Beauty with a sentimental flare...I love  reading your work!


Mysteria
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9 posted 2002-02-22 12:21 PM


Oh my goodness, you need a holiday honey (just kidding of course) but oh did I like this one, did you do more like this?  Can you send them when you get time Karilea?  I am too lazy to go look   AND...while I am at it, I believe I requested all poetry be sent via email so I don't miss it, now see, I missed this almost.

Live today like it was your last day on earth!
  ~* I don't know who said it but they were sure right *~



Rex Allen McCoy
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10 posted 2002-02-22 10:13 AM



haydenjames
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11 posted 2002-02-22 10:27 AM


loved it! Much luv!

Hayden

My poetry is at:  http://www.thehayden.org

Martie
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12 posted 2002-02-22 10:36 AM


Karilea

"and it seems
that everything
under the sun
has been known
to the sun and
is not new to
the sun

and I would have to agree

but it would not make
me love you less"

Yes!  

Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now
13 posted 2002-02-22 11:37 AM


Sunshine - this is stunning, it says everything. What a terrific writing...

BC

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14 posted 2002-02-22 02:58 PM


I want to think like this. . .

this is a wonderful look at a life. . . well, at least one of them. . .

great job. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Magnus
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15 posted 2002-02-22 03:24 PM


Wow...now that is a ton of words...and makes
total sense too....I can sense the frustration....and the wondering...

nicely done KJ

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16 posted 2002-02-22 04:07 PM


( smiling) a ramble with reason..saying much in a many worded way..that may not be too many and one wonders if too few? Still...the way it forms in ones mind is not unfamiliar and with it comes images too familiar...

suthern
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17 posted 2002-02-23 06:08 PM


Keep thinking, dear lady. *S* And keep sharing your thoughts' journey with us... I greatly enjoyed this. *S*
Sunshine
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18 posted 2002-02-24 08:20 AM


Duncan, a 10? from you? I'm blessed!  Thank you!...

Two tens! Nancy..hand jive!?  Hey! I grew up with Grease...LOL...so very glad this gave lend to a ramble...do it girl...I'll be looking...

Helmut, of course you are stuck...doesn't the Sun come up EVERY day?...thank you!

doreen, we KNOW He has a sense of humor.  That's why Passiosn is tsukc with em.

Startime, I like leaving pawprints on paper...thank you...

Noah, thank you for reading the poem...your constant presence is always a gift!...

Thank you for following along, 'Deer, even when I took a turn here and there, I couldn't lose a good reader...

amusemi...flairs of flares is what keeps the spark ignited...thank you!...

Mysteria, I need a holiday?!  You are SO right...and did I do more like this?  Assuredly so!  I first thought folks thought I was doing "doreen" but then they came to be ways of true expression and I could understand why it is such a release to let one's thoughts ramble such as here and then I saw the difference between doreen's writings and mine and hers are always so much better but I shall continue rambling...just because...

Thank you Rex...it's always nice to see you pop in....

Thank you hayden...

Martie...Yes!  Indeed....

BC, thank you!  It is fun to read, isn't it?

Sven, trust me, you don't want to think like this...you want to think just as you do, and in that way you shall always be unique...

Magnus, certainly a ton of frustration, you've got that right...and I shall always wonder...it's part of growing...thank you!...

Captain...ying my yang why don't you and give me reason for yet another wordy ramble that won't say it all...thank you!...

suthern, if you will promise to keep reading, I shall promise to keep writing...but I could stand for some reading of you, my dear one....thank you!...

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (02-24-2002 08:24 AM).]

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