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Poet deVine
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0 posted 2002-02-21 06:49 PM



At first blush it’s only a poem
like others that have gone before
but bide your time, read between the lines
you’ll find it never rains but it pours

First and foremost is the rhyme
it must tickle your fancy just so
and when all is said and all is done
the riddle in the rhyme, you’ll know.

Certainly, It does my heart good
to see you here, reading poetry
I hope my lines today have not
added insult to injury

With all due respect, I beg
the milk of human kindness from you
tho flattery will get you nowhere
could you spare a good word or two?

Do not damn with faint praise
nor be a fair weather friend
I can face the music that
your critique will send

If still waters run deep in here
it’s a blessing in disguise
for each line is written to get you
right between the eyes

So read from top to bottom
I expect no words of praise
but try to count how many
phrases are cliches!


*Shhh..if you read this post before and know the total, please don't give it away!!!

[This message has been edited by Poet deVine (02-21-2002 06:50 PM).]

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ethome
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1 posted 2002-02-21 06:55 PM


I've never read it before but I get 21???? I might have gone too fast?
It's very clevery written and it's an enjoyable read!
Those cliches get thrown onto our everyday speech so easily that we don't even notice ourselves using them.
Thanks for the fun!

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2 posted 2002-02-21 07:26 PM


*giggling* I have never read it before but sure am glad I did this time...You are very masterful at putting in so many cliches...I love it...**big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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3 posted 2002-02-21 07:32 PM




(smiles) Ooohhhhhhh...I can't even begin to count all the cliches in this, but all I know is there's a lot, and they're still used a lot today! (kiss on cheek) This is such a beautifully clever poem, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sharon, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Poet deVine
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4 posted 2002-02-21 10:13 PM


Thank you!! I thought we needed some fun around here!!
amusemi
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5 posted 2002-02-22 12:04 PM


There are cliche's in this?

Just kiddin'!

Terrific compilation here, this must have been tough...it's definately worth it though.  I loved the read .

Duncan
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6 posted 2002-02-22 12:15 PM


Nineteen, I think.  Am I right, huh?
Bill Charles
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7 posted 2002-02-22 12:26 PM


Poet deVine - excellent write. I count one cliche...

BC

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8 posted 2002-02-23 03:52 AM



Sharon-
How fun...I love it.

Now...let's see...23?  Or...could this be a
trick question?  LOL!  I'm too tired to give
it much thought right now, so I may have to
come back later, for a re-count.

Thanks for the smile and the bit of fun.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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9 posted 2002-02-23 07:50 AM


Sharon,

This is fantastic! I once replied to a critic of my poetry that due to the nature of a cliche, each has as a unique meaning in its evolution, different that the sum of it's individual words. When properly used, cliches tell their own wonderful story.

And it would be fun to just write a poem of cliches. You are close, dear Lady! Thanks for this delightful piece of Art.

Go! Lady! Go!

((Sharon))
-newell

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Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher

lucky
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10 posted 2002-02-23 01:25 PM


I've got it..! they all are cliches depending on where your coming from. That's what I get for knowing 3 different languages. This is excellent piece of art and skill. Thank you for the read.

dale

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11 posted 2002-02-23 01:35 PM


Sharon,

I loved this!   So often poetry can get too serious and it's nice to sometimes sit back with something like this and just smile.

Michael

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Poet deVine
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12 posted 2002-02-23 04:36 PM


thank you all!! I'm glad you enjoyed this.. there are indeed 19......
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13 posted 2002-02-24 12:03 PM


*gives up* I don't know!!! Why'd you have to make it so hard?

(<>..<>)

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Dr.Moose1
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14 posted 2002-02-24 09:17 AM


PDV,
Why, 19's just a drop in the bucket, if you get my drift. To make a long story short, I thought there was a whole slew of 'em. To write something like you have here, now that's entertainment.
Doc

Kit McCallum
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15 posted 2002-02-24 10:11 AM


Ah Sharon ... masterfully written my friend. To pull so many cliches together and have the poem flow so well, could not have been an easy challenge. Well done indeed!

Best wishes,
/Kit

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