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Temptress
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0 posted 2002-02-18 05:02 PM


Lift the lid carefully
peek inside
and smile gently on what waits for you.
My heart sleeps until you come again
and your voice is calming
so my heart sleeps in the wake of the lullabye
cast lovingly by the voice I've missed.
Lift the lid carefully
climb in beside me
and let us awaken to a world of possibilities.
I want you just as much as you want me
but my voice won't let me
and neither will the time apart.
This is simplicity cast into the waters of your life
hoping to snag quietly on some small remembrance
after you are gone.
This is love
for you.

For all who watch.Dare you say hello? Come in and ask the questions that are on your mind, but spare me your judgement until you truly sipped of me.

© Copyright 2002 Jennifer - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-02-18 05:07 PM


OMG..

How sweet is this!
its splendid....

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2 posted 2002-02-18 05:13 PM


wow. . . this is very heartfelt and tender. . .

excellent from you. . .

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3 posted 2002-02-18 05:47 PM




(smiles) Awwwwwwww, you are sooooooo romantic, sweet friend, I know your love is forever going to love this! (kiss on cheek) May you forever wake to the softness of his lullabye, sweet friend, we all love you so much, this is sooooo beautiful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jenn, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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4 posted 2002-02-18 06:01 PM


Reading this is like sipping a delicate wine. Very nicely done!
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5 posted 2002-02-19 12:05 PM


Temptress,

   Oh sweet this is I love the last two lines.. you ended it perfectly

Hugs,
Tara

"My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read"
     - Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home

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6 posted 2002-02-19 12:25 PM


I liked the ending too.
Very much~

Oh, and I like the new picture.  

BluesSerenade
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7 posted 2002-02-19 12:44 PM


I'm stressing over here,  
it is a new picture, right?


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8 posted 2002-02-19 07:36 AM


You know I love this.
Temptress
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9 posted 2002-02-19 09:28 AM



Thanks everyone...and yes..its a new picture.

For all who watch.Dare you say hello? Come in and ask the questions that are on your mind, but spare me your judgement until you truly sipped of me.

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10 posted 2002-02-19 10:20 AM


I noticed the new picture right away.  It compliments the poem very well.  But, then again, the poem would be equally as wonderful without it.  

Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks?  It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

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