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wayoutwalt
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0 posted 2002-02-25 11:27 PM


Sonnet Sized (based on Sonic, America's Drive-In)

The systematic roll of window first
As thunder turns my nerves into a glue
And only one thing now will quench my thirst
A greater love than Ocean Water blue!
I push the button, red, to place my call
My order, she asks, is it now at hand?
I do not wish this time to end at all
So garbled words, she will not understand
Insistent now, she asks that I repeat
By every means, she wants to get it right
Do I want a single or double meat
My words, unheard, and so she stays from sight
Her feet are not iambic, nor are the fries
So I ask she take it back and make it Sonnet Sized

[This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (02-26-2002 11:09 AM).]

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nakdthoughts
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1 posted 2002-02-25 11:54 PM


haaaaa.... you have the greatest sense of humor
*s

M

Magicmystery
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2 posted 2002-02-26 01:21 AM


CUTE POEM
Make mine a CHEEEEZE burger.

Cherish the good memories past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow.
But above all... be kind to yourself today.

Temptress
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3 posted 2002-02-26 01:56 AM


Cute from you, Sir.

love this! Your work like this always makes me smile.

For all who watch.Dare you say hello? Come in and ask the questions that are on your mind, but spare me your judgement until you truly sipped of me.

Mistletoe Angel
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4 posted 2002-02-26 08:19 AM




(giggles in delight) Awwwwwww, this is sooooooo funny and cute, in Colorado we have many new Sonics and I know all about the drive-in service and they come to you on roller-blades with the treats, ooohhhhh...I hope when you ordered the sonnet size the server didn't trip on a couplet! (giggles) we all love you so much, sweet friend, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Walter, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Nan
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5 posted 2002-02-26 08:31 AM


I have no SONICS here... My iambics are surely pentametering though...
BluesSerenade
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6 posted 2002-02-26 01:16 PM


Yesiree, that's the way to go about it,
keep on sending it back until they get it right.
You are too much fun Walt!    

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